Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and prepositions (e.g., “brought” → “bought”, “brought that to me” → “bought it for me”, “in the mall” needs clarification). Avoid repeating ideas (excited/first time/remember).

Example: Yes. I had a bike as a child. I was about twelve when my father bought it for me, and I still remember riding it for the first time near the mall. I was very excited because it was my first bike and my father had saved up to buy it for me.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer, then support it with specific reasons and use linking words. Fix grammar (article use, plural/singular agreement, verb forms) and avoid incomplete sentences. Mention examples and brief comparisons to strengthen your point.

Example: Not really. Bicycles are less common in the Philippines because most people prefer motorcycles and cars. Also, many commuters use jeepneys for short trips, so there is less demand for bikes. However, bikes are becoming more popular in some cities for exercise and short-distance travel.

× My father brought that to me.

✓ My father bought it for me.

The student used 'brought' incorrectly; 'brought' implies carrying something to a place while 'bought' (past tense of 'buy') indicates purchasing, which fits the context of receiving a purchased bike. Use 'bought' to show that the father purchased the bike for the student. Suggestion: Use 'bought' for past actions of purchasing.

× I remember in the mall and I'm really excited when I started biking because that's my first time and I will not forget the time because my father is the one bought it for me.

✓ I remember being at the mall and being really excited when I started biking because it was my first time, and I will never forget it because my father was the one who bought it for me.

Multiple issues: incorrect preposition/phrase 'in the mall' needs 'being at the mall' for a memory; tense consistency: 'I'm really excited' should be past tense 'was really excited' or use 'being really excited' in a remembered context; 'that's my first time' should be past 'it was my first time'; 'I will not forget the time' is awkward, use 'I will never forget it'; 'my father is the one bought it for me' is ungrammatical — correct form is 'my father was the one who bought it for me' (use past 'was' and include relative pronoun 'who'). Suggestion: Keep past-tense consistently when recounting past events and use correct relative clause form 'the one who + past verb.'

× In our country bikes are not popular.

✓ Bikes are not popular in our country.

Sentence order is acceptable but more natural placement is subject first; no major tense error, but student asked about general present situation so present simple 'are' is correct. The original is passable; this correction improves natural word order. Suggestion: Use natural subject-first word order for clarity.

× Most of the people there they rode motorcycle and cars.

✓ Most people there ride motorcycles and cars.

Problems: redundant subject 'Most of the people... they'; tense and agreement: 'rode' is past tense but context asks about general present habit, so use present simple 'ride'; 'motorcycle' should be plural 'motorcycles' or 'motorbike(s)'. Suggestion: Remove redundancy, use present simple for habits, and make nouns plural when referring generally.

× In Philippines we also used jeepneys as a major transportation.

✓ In the Philippines we also use jeepneys as a major form of transportation.

Several issues: country name needs definite article 'the Philippines'; tense should be present simple 'use' for general fact rather than past 'used'; 'major transportation' is unnatural — use 'a major form of transportation.' Suggestion: Use 'the Philippines', present simple for general statements, and natural collocations like 'form of transportation.'

× Not all of the people really likes bike because in the.

✓ Not all people really like bikes because of that.

Multiple errors: 'Not all of the people' is wordy—use 'Not all people'; 'likes' disagrees with plural subject—use 'like'; 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally; sentence ends abruptly 'because in the.' Replace with 'because of that' or state the reason explicitly. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb agreement, use plurals for general nouns, and complete the clause with a clear reason or 'because of that'.