Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and correct grammar, avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct unnatural expressions (e.g. “arrive by my own”, “ride in AI”) and keep within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes. I learned to ride a bike when I was about five; my grandmother bought it for me and helped me practise until I could ride on my own. Because of that, I enjoy cycling in my free time — it’s fun and gives me a real sense of freedom.

Suggestion: Reduce filler words (uh, umm, maybe) and use clearer linking words. Give a direct topic sentence, then support with specific reasons or an example. Use precise vocabulary (e.g. “dockless shared bikes”, “commute”) and avoid repeating phrases.

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because dockless shared bikes are available almost everywhere. For example, I often use a shared bike to commute short distances since it’s cheap and convenient, especially during rush hour.

× I learned to ride a bike when I was about 5 years old and my grandmother just bought me a bike and helped me to practice until I could arrive by my own.

✓ I learned to ride a bike when I was about five years old. My grandmother had just bought me a bike and helped me practice until I could ride on my own.

Mixed past tenses and incorrect verb choice: 'just bought' with 'learned' works but 'had just bought' clarifies the sequence (purchase before learning). 'Helped me to practice' is improved to 'helped me practice' (omit to for verb following 'help'). 'Arrive by my own' is incorrect; the intended meaning is 'ride on my own'. Use 'on my own' for independence and 'ride' as the correct verb. Use consistent simple past or past perfect to show order of events. Suggestion: Use past perfect (had + past participle) for the earlier action when necessary, remove unnecessary 'to' after 'help', and replace wrong verbs/phrases with appropriate ones.

× I love to ride in AI, love to ride bike in my free time because it was fun and gave me a sense of freedom.

✓ I love to ride a bike, and I enjoy riding in my free time because it is fun and gives me a sense of freedom.

Several issues: 'ride in AI' appears to be incorrect or a typo; likely meant 'ride a bike'. Use the article 'a' with singular countable noun 'bike'. Coordinate independent clauses with 'and'. Tense consistency: 'was fun and gave me' should be present tense to match 'I love' and 'I enjoy': use 'is fun and gives me'. Also use 'riding' after 'enjoy' or 'love to ride a bike' consistently. Suggestion: Correct typos, include articles for countable nouns, keep tense consistent across clauses.

× I think it's quite popular cause in our country you can see the shared bikes everywhere and uh, maybe for me, when I like to umm, commute to other places, I would like to just umm, use a shared bike to ride to the, uh, place I want.

✓ I think it's quite popular, because in our country you can see shared bikes everywhere. For me, when I commute to other places, I like to use a shared bike to get to the place I want.

Problems addressed: 'cause' is informal; use 'because'. 'the shared bikes' — article 'the' is unnecessary; 'shared bikes' general plural is correct. Remove filler words 'uh, umm'. 'when I like to commute' is unnatural; use 'when I commute'. 'I would like to just use' is wordy—use 'I like to use' for habitual preference. 'ride to the place I want' is awkward; 'get to the place I want' or 'get where I want to go' is clearer. Also adjust tense/aspect for habitual actions (present simple). Suggestion: Remove fillers, use more natural collocations and correct articles/pronouns.