Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce fillers (uh, you know) and correct grammar (e.g. "at first" not "at the first time in the 1st place"). Add a clear feeling or result to finish the answer.

Example: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. My father taught me how to ride it, and I practiced around our neighborhood every afternoon. At first I was quite scared, but day by day I became more confident and could ride long distances without help.

Suggestion: Clarify meaning and avoid unrelated or incorrect words ("mice" and "Dubai" are mistakes). Give a clear topic sentence, then support with a couple of specific reasons and a brief example. Use linking words (for example, because, therefore) and avoid repetition and fillers.

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many children and students ride to school because it is cheap and convenient, and parents often prefer it when schools are nearby. For example, in my neighborhood most primary school students cycle to class every day because public transport is limited.

× Yes. So actually when I was a child, I uh, used to ride a bike around my neighborhood and that, uh, my, my father is the, the first person who taught me how to ride uh, the bike. And actually at the, at first time in the 1st place, I, you know, I felt a lot, but, uh, day by day.

✓ Yes. So actually when I was a child, I used to ride a bike around my neighborhood, and my father was the first person who taught me how to ride the bike. At first, I felt very scared, but day by day I improved.

The original contains several issues; primary issues relevant to the list are incorrect verb forms and wording that involve -ing or participle usage and general sentence structure. 'is the first person who taught me' mixes present simple with past action; use past 'was'. 'at the, at first time in the 1st place' is ungrammatical; use 'At first'. 'I felt a lot' is vague and incorrect; 'felt very scared' or 'felt nervous' is appropriate. Suggestion: keep tense consistent for past habits (used to, was, taught), use appropriate adjectives instead of 'a lot', and simplify redundancy (remove filler words).

× Yes. Uh, I believe that mice play a very important role in, uh, my country because, you know, uh, many children and students in my country in Vietnamese school, uh, usually go to uh, the school by bike because their parents are very busy.

✓ Yes. I believe that bicycles play a very important role in my country because many children and students in Vietnamese schools usually go to school by bike because their parents are very busy.

The original uses 'mice' which is the plural of 'mouse' and clearly incorrect; the intended word is 'bikes' or 'bicycles'. Also 'in Vietnamese school' should be plural 'in Vietnamese schools' to match 'many children and students'. Suggestion: use the correct noun 'bicycles' or 'bikes' and make the noun 'school' consistent in number when referring generally to multiple schools.

× Yes. Uh, I believe that mice play a very important role in, uh, my country because, you know, uh, many children and students in my country in Vietnamese school, uh, usually go to uh, the school by bike because their parents are very busy.

✓ Yes. I believe that bicycles play a very important role in my country because many children and students in Vietnamese schools usually go to school by bike because their parents are very busy.

The original includes the phrase 'go to uh, the school' which wrongly uses the definite article 'the' when speaking about going to school in general. In English, we say 'go to school' without 'the' for the activity/place in general. Suggestion: remove the definite article when referring to the general action of attending school.

× And I think that in the near future, Dubai is also a good choice for everyone.

✓ And I think that in the near future, biking will also become a good option for everyone.

The original sentence seems to mistakenly mention 'Dubai' which is out of context; assuming the intended meaning is about biking becoming more popular, use future tense 'will become' to express change expected in the future. The problem relates to future tense phrasing and incorrect lexical choice. Suggestion: use 'will' plus base verb for future predictions and choose the correct noun ('biking' or 'bikes' rather than a place name) to convey the idea.