Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and correct grammar: use a clear topic sentence, fix minor grammar errors, reduce redundancy, and add one specific detail. Link sentences for coherence. For example, say who gave it and one memory briefly.

Example: Yes, I did — I had a pink bike with training wheels that my dad gave me for Christmas. I remember running to the door when he arrived and feeling so excited that I rode it around the garden all afternoon.

Suggestion: Improve grammar and coherence: start with a direct topic sentence, correct mistakes (e.g., "people love" not "people their love"), and use one or two linking words to explain reasons with specific examples. Avoid repeating 'in Brazil'.

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in Brazil. Many people cycle along the beach and through city streets because cycling is a convenient way to exercise and saves money on fuel, especially during weekends.

× It had training wheels and my dad gave me for Christmas and I remember when he arrived with that bike and I was very excited.

✓ It had training wheels, and my dad gave it to me for Christmas. I remember when he arrived with that bike, and I was very excited.

Multiple issues: missing object after 'gave' (requires 'it' and preposition 'to'), run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and sentence boundary. Correct by supplying the object 'it' and 'to' to form 'gave it to me', and split into two sentences for clarity. Also add commas before conjunctions for readability.

× It was a pinky bike, very pretty.

✓ It was a pink bike, very pretty.

'Pinky' is informal and not the correct adjective; the correct adjective for color is 'pink'. Use 'pink' to describe the bike's color.

× I am from Brazil and in Brazil people their love going out on their bikes and ride their bikes on the beach, on the streets because it's a good way to exercise and save money from gas.

✓ I am from Brazil, and in Brazil people love going out on their bikes and riding their bikes on the beach and on the streets because it's a good way to exercise and save money on gas.

'Their' is an incorrect possessive here and should be removed; the verb forms are inconsistent: use 'love going' and parallel gerund forms 'going' and 'riding'. Also preposition 'from' after 'save money' should be 'on' (save money on gas). Add commas for clarity and maintain parallel structure.

× people their love going out on their bikes and ride their bikes on the beach, on the streets

✓ people love going out on their bikes and riding their bikes on the beach and on the streets

After 'love' the noun phrase should be a gerund phrase; maintain parallel gerunds 'going' and 'riding' rather than mixing 'going' and base form 'ride'. Remove the extraneous 'their'.

× Did you have a bike when you were a child?

✓ Did you have a bike when you were a child?

No correction needed; included for completeness. The sentence correctly uses the indefinite article 'a' with 'bike' for a non-specific instance in the past.