Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details linked logically. Avoid repetitions and unnecessary hesitations. Mention one memorable detail (where you rode it or who taught you) and finish with a brief consequence (it was stolen).

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it to practice riding and even learned how to do small drifts on quiet streets with my friends, which was exciting. Unfortunately, the bike was later stolen, so I no longer had it.

Suggestion: Begin with a direct answer, then give a clear conditional explanation using linking words like 'however' or 'in some areas'. Provide a specific comparison (city centre vs suburbs or rural areas) and one example of where bikes are common. Avoid repeating phrases.

Example: It depends on the area. In big cities in Japan people often use cars or public transport, however in suburban and rural areas bicycles are still common for short trips, especially among students and older people.

× And it was eventually stolen and I didn't, I didn't.

✓ And it was eventually stolen, and I didn't have it anymore.

The original sentence is missing the past participle structure to complete the negative idea; saying 'I didn't' alone leaves the verb out. Use 'I didn't have it anymore' to indicate lack of possession after the theft. Also combine clauses with a comma for clarity. Suggestion: Always include the main verb after an auxiliary (didn't + base verb) and keep tense consistent.

× Depends on what part of the depends on what part of the city or place.

✓ It depends on which part of the city or area you mean.

The original is repetitive and lacks a clear subject. Begin with the subject 'It' and use 'depends on which part' to ask for specification. Replace 'place' with 'area' or 'part' to avoid redundancy. Suggestion: Start sentences with explicit subjects and avoid repeating phrases.

× Because I live in Japan and Japan has a lot of cars and people tended to use cars instead of bicycles.

✓ Because I live in Japan, where there are many cars, and people tend to use cars instead of bicycles.

Tense and agreement were inconsistent: 'tended' (past) conflicts with the present context. Use present tense 'tend' to describe a general habit. Also change 'Japan has a lot of cars' to 'there are many cars' for natural English. Use a relative clause 'where' to connect ideas. Suggestion: Use present simple to describe general facts and habits and ensure verb tenses remain consistent.

× Because I live in Japan and Japan has a lot of cars and people tended to use cars instead of bicycles.

✓ Because I live in Japan, where there are many cars, and people tend to use cars instead of bicycles.

'A lot of cars' is acceptable but 'there are many cars' is more natural. Ensure plural noun 'cars' matches plural verb forms when rephrasing. Also keep 'bicycles' plural to match 'cars.' Suggestion: Match noun plurality with natural expressions and maintain parallel structure.