Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief detail), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundant or confusing phrases and keep to 2–4 sentences. Also correct tense and preposition errors (e.g., “at my grandparents’ house,” “cousins who came from Istanbul,” “I didn’t use it in winter”).

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it at my grandparents’ house in my mother’s hometown, and I often rode with my cousins who came from Istanbul. Because of the cold weather, I didn’t use the bike much during winter.

Suggestion: Provide a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and a brief contrast. Use linking words like 'because' and 'however', and include one concrete example or comparison. Keep sentences grammatical and avoid awkward phrasing (e.g., 'as much as in European cities', 'people use their own vehicles').

Example: I don't think bikes are as popular in my country as they are in many European cities because most people prefer private cars or public transport. However, bikes are common among children for play and short trips; for example, many families buy simple bicycles for kids rather than adults.

× Hence I had a bike when I was a child and I started in my grandparents house in my mother's hometown city and I frequently rode my bike when I was a child with my cousins who are coming from Istanbul and because of that I saw that my grandparents house I didn't use it in winters often.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child. I started riding it at my grandparents' house in my mother's hometown, and I frequently rode with my cousins who came from Istanbul. Because of the cold winters at my grandparents' house, I did not use the bike often in winter.

Multiple past-tense verbs and sequence of events need consistent past tense. Use simple past for completed actions (started, rode, came, did not use). Also split into shorter sentences to improve clarity and chronological order. Suggestions: Use simple past for past events ('started', 'rode', 'came', 'did not use'), use possessive form 'grandparents'' for the house belonging to grandparents, and separate ideas into sentences to avoid run-on sentences.

× Hence I had a bike when I was a child and I started in my grandparents house in my mother's hometown city and I frequently rode my bike when I was a child with my cousins who are coming from Istanbul and because of that I saw that my grandparents house I didn't use it in winters often.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child. I started riding it at my grandparents' house in my mother's hometown, and I frequently rode with my cousins who came from Istanbul. Because of the cold winters at my grandparents' house, I did not use the bike often in winter.

Incorrect or missing prepositions: use 'at' for locations ('at my grandparents' house'), use 'in' for seasons ('in winter'), and use 'with' to indicate company ('rode with my cousins'). Also 'from Istanbul' was fine but 'came from Istanbul' fits past context. Suggestions: Check common prepositions for locations and seasons and practice collocations like 'at home/at the house', 'in winter', and 'ride with someone'.

× I started in my grandparents house in my mother's hometown city and I frequently rode my bike when I was a child with my cousins who are coming from Istanbul

✓ I started riding it at my grandparents' house in my mother's hometown, and I frequently rode with my cousins who came from Istanbul.

Pronoun reference and tense: 'it' should refer clearly to 'bike' and 'who are coming' should be past ('who came') to match the rest of the sentence. Also possessive form 'grandparents'' required. Ensure pronouns clearly refer to nouns and match tense. Suggestions: Keep pronoun references close to their nouns and align tense between relative clauses and main clauses.

× I started in my grandparents house in my mother's hometown city and I frequently rode my bike when I was a child with my cousins who are coming from Istanbul and because of that I saw that my grandparents house I didn't use it in winters often.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child. I started riding it at my grandparents' house in my mother's hometown, and I frequently rode with my cousins who came from Istanbul. Because of the cold winters at my grandparents' house, I did not use the bike often in winter.

Missing possessive article/apostrophe: use 'grandparents'' to show possession. Also unnecessary 'the' before 'winters' — say 'in winter' or 'during the winters'. Suggestions: Use apostrophe-s or s-apostrophe for possession (grandparents'), and prefer 'in winter' for general seasonal statements.

× I don't really think the bikes are popular as much as the European cities in my country because most of the people using their own vehicles or public transportation to go somewhere.

✓ I don't think bikes are as popular in my country as they are in many European cities because most people use their own vehicles or public transportation to get around.

Awkward comparative structure and missing verbs. Use 'as ... as' for comparisons ('as popular in my country as they are in European cities'). The clause 'most of the people using' lacks a verb; change to 'most people use'. Also 'to get around' is a natural phrase. Suggestions: Use the correct comparative pattern 'as + adjective + in/at + place + as', ensure each clause has a finite verb, and prefer natural collocations like 'get around'.

× ...because most of the people using their own vehicles or public transportation to go somewhere.

✓ ...because most people use their own vehicles or public transportation to get around.

The original fragment lacked the third-person singular verb form; 'people' is plural so use 'use'. The sentence also needed a finite verb. Replace 'using' with 'use' to form a complete clause. Suggestions: Ensure subject and verb are present and agree; convert -ing clauses to finite verbs when they need to form the main clause.

× But bikes are popular among the children.

✓ But bikes are popular among children.

Present tense is acceptable, but 'the children' is overly specific; use 'children' for general statements. Article 'the' can be omitted. Also 'are popular among children' is the natural collocation. Suggestions: For generalizations avoid 'the' before plural nouns; say 'children' rather than 'the children'.