Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: ใช้ประโยคที่ชัดเจน ตรงประเด็น และไวยากรณ์ถูกต้อง อธิบายสั้นๆ ว่ามีจักรยานหรือไม่ พร้อมรายละเอียดเสริมอย่างเมื่อไรหรือใครให้ เช่น ระบุวัยหรือความทรงจำสั้นๆ ใช้เชื่อมโยงคำว่า "when" เพื่อให้ได้ประโยคที่เป็นธรรมชาติ

Example: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. My parents bought it for me when I was seven, and I used to ride it around the neighborhood every afternoon.

Suggestion: ตอบคำถามโดยตรง ใช้ข้อความที่เป็นระเบียบและจับใจความได้ ใช้เหตุผลและตัวอย่างเฉพาะเจาะจง อธิบายเหตุผลที่จักรยานได้รับความนิยม เช่น ใช้เดินทางสั้นๆ ประหยัดค่าใช้จ่าย และนักเรียนใช้จักรยานไปโรงเรียน ใช้คำเชื่อม (because, for example, so) เพื่อความลื่นไหล และหลีกเลี่ยงคำที่ไม่เกี่ยวข้องหรือคำที่สะกด/ใช้ผิด

Example: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many students ride bicycles to school every day, and some people use them to commute short distances to work because it saves money on transport.

× Yes, I apply when I was a shy.

✓ Yes, I had one when I was a child.

The original sentence has verb choice and sentence structure errors. The student used 'apply' incorrectly instead of a past possession verb and 'shy' instead of 'child'. Use the past-tense verb 'had' to indicate possession in the past. Replace 'shy' with the appropriate noun 'child'. Also include the article 'one' to refer to the bike. Suggestion: practice using 'have' in past tense (had) for past possession and use correct noun forms for people (child).

× Yes, yes, eating bicycle are quite popular is my plenty because many people use them for short teeth and to chase money on 10 score.

✓ Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because many people use them for short trips and to save money.

This sentence has many word choice and structure problems. 'Eating bicycle' is incorrect; use 'bicycles'. 'Are quite popular' is correct but should be followed by a prepositional phrase 'in my country'. 'Is my plenty' is meaningless and should be removed. 'Short teeth' is incorrect for 'short trips'. 'To chase money on 10 score' is unintelligible; based on context the intended meaning is likely 'to save money'. Suggestion: use clear nouns ('bicycles', 'trips'), correct prepositions ('in my country'), and simple purpose phrases ('to save money').

× For example, students and us with often require to school hours and begin required also like for.

✓ For example, students and people often use bicycles to get to school and work.

The original fragment has pronoun misuse ('us' instead of 'people' or 'we') and broken sentence structure. 'Require to school hours' and 'begin required also like for' are ungrammatical. A clear, grammatical version uses the subject 'students and people' and the verb phrase 'often use bicycles to get to school and work'. Suggestion: form complete clauses with subject + verb + object and use appropriate verbs for purpose (use/get to).