Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Simplify and naturalize your sentences, reduce hesitations and redundancy, and use clear past-tense narrative with linking words. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (e.g., who you rode with, where you rode, how it felt). Avoid filler sounds (umm, uh) and repair phrases. Keep answers to no more than five concise sentences.

Example: Yes — I had a bike from the age of five. It was my older brother’s old bike, painted in two colours. I loved riding it around our courtyard every afternoon, usually with my friend Ali. Riding made me feel free and confident, and I remember learning to balance without training wheels.

Suggestion: Make your opinion clear and support it with specific reasons and a concise comparison. Use linking words (however, although, because) to connect ideas and avoid repetitions and hesitations. State a clear present-tense opinion first, then contrast with the past and give one concrete reason (cost, infrastructure, or culture).

Example: Yes, bikes are much more popular now than before. However, when I was a child they were relatively uncommon because many families could not afford them. In recent years cheaper models and better cycling paths have made riding more accessible for students and commuters.

× Later on it is transferred to me and it was a mixed color one.

✓ Later on it was transferred to me and it was a mixed-color one.

The context is past narrative so present tense 'is transferred' is incorrect; use past tense 'was transferred'. Also 'mixed color' needs a hyphen as a compound adjective before a noun: 'mixed-color'. Suggestion: Keep all verbs in the past when describing past events and use hyphens for compound adjectives before nouns.

× I was so much interested in this and we were riding, umm, to the, uh, courtyard and.

✓ I was very interested in it and we used to ride to the courtyard.

Awkward phrasing 'so much interested in this' and incomplete clause ending with 'and.' Use 'very interested in it' and 'used to ride' to indicate habitual past action. Remove filler words and unnecessary commas. Suggestion: Use 'very interested in' and 'used to' for repeated past actions; finish sentences completely.

× Well, nowadays the bike is so popular in my country, uh, but during past years, for example, especially in my childhood, it was not familiar to, uh, everyone because I, I the price of the bike is beyond a middle class family.

✓ Well, nowadays bikes are very popular in my country, but in past years, for example during my childhood, they were not familiar to everyone because the price of a bike was beyond a middle-class family's budget.

Mixed tenses and number agreement: 'nowadays' requires present tense and plural 'bikes are'; earlier period needs past tense 'were'. 'Not familiar to everyone' is acceptable but 'they were not familiar to everyone' is clearer. The fragment 'I, I the price...' is ungrammatical; correct structure is 'because the price of a bike was beyond a middle-class family's budget.' Use 'a bike' (general) and possessive 'family's budget'. Hyphenate 'middle-class'. Suggestion: Match singular/plural and tense across clauses, and use clear sentence structure: subject + verb + object.

× Well, nowadays the bike is so popular in my country, uh, but during past years, for example, especially in my childhood, it was not familiar to, uh, everyone because I, I the price of the bike is beyond a middle class family.

✓ Well, nowadays bikes are very popular in my country, but in past years, for example during my childhood, they were not familiar to everyone because the price of a bike was beyond a middle-class family's budget.

Using 'the bike' (singular, definite) is incorrect when speaking generally; use plural 'bikes' with present tense or 'a bike' when referring to price generally. Also maintain plural agreement when referring to people ('they were not familiar to everyone'). Suggestion: Use plural nouns for general statements ('bikes are') and 'a/an' for general singular references to items ('a bike').