Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Focus on clear grammar, accurate word choice and concise structure. Begin with a direct topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g. 'ride' not 'write'/'run'), and limit to up to five sentences. Use one or two supporting details linked logically (use linking words like 'but' or 'so'). Be specific about why you didn’t use it and how it looked or made you feel.

Example: Yes, I did. It was a beautiful red bike my parents bought for me, but I never learned to ride it properly, so it mostly sat unused in the garage. Because it was new and a bit too big for me, I felt nervous about falling. Looking back, I wish someone had helped me practice more.

Suggestion: Improve fluency and clarity by using correct verbs and reducing repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a specific reason with a linked example. Correct phrases like 'when I stroll around my country' and avoid repeating words. Add a brief supporting detail about where or why bikes are popular.

Example: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. For example, when I walk through my neighborhood I often see many children and adults riding bikes to school and shops, which suggests they are a common and practical mode of transport.

× Yes, I had a bike when as a child but I couldn't write it because I never run properly.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I couldn't ride it because I never rode properly.

The sentence mixes incorrect verb forms and an extra word. 'when as a child' is incorrect; use 'when I was a child'. 'write' is a wrong verb; context requires 'ride'. 'run' is present tense and wrong verb; use past tense 'rode' to match 'had' and 'couldn't' indicating past habitual ability. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for past events and choose the correct verb meaning (ride for bicycles).

× It was beautiful, almost showpiece bike but my parents bought so I mostly sat in the garage unused.

✓ It was a beautiful, almost showpiece bike, but my parents bought it for me so it mostly sat unused in the garage.

Missing indefinite article before 'beautiful' and missing object pronoun after 'bought' cause ungrammatical structure. 'almost showpiece bike' needs an article and hyphenation isn't required here; 'bought so I mostly sat' is incorrect subject usage—people sit, not bikes; the intended meaning is the bike sat unused. Reorder phrase to 'it mostly sat unused in the garage' and include 'for me' or 'it' after 'bought' as needed. Suggestion: include necessary articles ('a') and objects ('it') and keep subject consistent with actions (bike sat).

× Yes, I think a bike is popular in my country because when I stroll strolling around the my country, I can I can sell the children riding a bike.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because when I stroll around the country, I can see children riding bikes.

Multiple problems: 'a bike is popular' should be plural 'bikes are popular' to talk about general popularity (singular/plural and subject-verb agreement). 'stroll strolling' is redundant; choose one form ('stroll'). 'the my country' has definite article misuse; use 'the' or nothing, here 'the country' or 'my country'—keep 'my country'. 'I can I can sell' repeats phrase and 'sell' is wrong verb; context likely 'see'. 'children riding a bike' should be plural 'riding bikes'. Suggestions: use plural nouns for general statements, avoid repetitions, correct verb choice ('see' rather than 'sell'), and remove extra articles.