Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid hesitations and repetition, correct grammar (e.g., tense and subject-verb agreement), and add one specific supporting detail. Use one linking word if you add contrast or consequence.

Example: I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford one. However, I often borrowed my friend's bicycle to ride to the park, which helped me learn to cycle and enjoy outdoor activities.

Suggestion: Make the answer more natural and reduce filler words. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then give a specific reason and an example. Use linking words (e.g., because, for example) and avoid repeating phrases.

Example: Yes, cycling is very popular in my country because many people use it to stay fit and save money. For example, I see groups of commuters and students riding bikes every morning to get exercise and avoid traffic.

× To be sincere, I didn't have a bike when I was a kid because my parents couldn't afford buying it.

✓ To be sincere, I didn't have a bike when I was a kid because my parents couldn't afford to buy one.

The phrase 'couldn't afford buying it' is incorrect modal + verb pattern. After 'couldn't afford' we use the infinitive 'to buy' or a noun phrase 'one' instead of 'it' here because 'a bike' was mentioned; using 'it' is less natural. Use 'couldn't afford to buy one' for correct modal verb + infinitive structure and clearer reference.

× Umm. But that that doesn't umm, makes me sad.

✓ But that doesn't make me sad.

The sentence has a doubled word 'that that', unnecessary filler 'umm', and wrong verb form 'makes' after 'doesn't'. In negative auxiliary constructions with 'doesn't', the main verb must be in base form: 'make'. Remove duplicates and fillers for clarity.

× I had borrowed some umm bike from my friend.

✓ I borrowed a bike from my friend.

Using 'had borrowed' (past perfect) is unnecessary without a reference point in the past; simple past 'borrowed' is appropriate. Also 'some bike' is incorrect collocation; use 'a bike'. Remove 'umm' for fluency.

× Admittedly, bikes and cycling are really popular in our in our country because we think that, umm, to be healthy we need to, uh, train a lot.

✓ Admittedly, bikes and cycling are really popular in our country because we think that to be healthy we need to exercise a lot.

The original repeats 'in our', contains fillers 'umm' and 'uh', and uses 'train a lot' which is less natural than 'exercise a lot' in this context. Also the infinitive clause 'to be healthy we need to exercise a lot' is correct; remove repetitions and fillers for clarity.

× And cycling helps us with that.

✓ And cycling helps with that.

'Helps us with that' is not incorrect but slightly wordy; 'helps with that' is more natural. If keeping 'us', it is acceptable: 'cycling helps us do that' would require a verb after 'helps'. This correction makes the sentence more concise and grammatically natural.