Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer is direct and natural but too brief. Add a short topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details (reason, memory or comparison) using a linking word to make it coherent. Keep it under five sentences.

Example: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I usually walked to school because my family lived nearby. However, I sometimes borrowed my friend’s bike at weekends, which I enjoyed because it felt freeing and faster than walking.

Suggestion: Your answer expresses opinion clearly but use clearer structure and more specific details. Start with a topic sentence giving your view, then add reasons or examples linked with words like 'because' or 'however'. Avoid filler words like 'honestly' and 'frankly'.

Example: Bikes are fairly common in my country, but overall cars are more popular. For example, in cities many people cycle for short trips because it’s cheap and avoids traffic, however most families prefer cars for comfort and longer journeys.

× Honestly, I've seen a lot of people who are riding the bikes, but frankly I feel like cars are more popular than bikes.

✓ Honestly, I've seen a lot of people riding bikes, but frankly I feel like cars are more popular than bikes.

The relative clause 'who are riding the bikes' is unidiomatic and wordy. Use the participle clause 'riding bikes' to describe people generally; omit the definite article before 'bikes' when speaking about bikes in general. This makes the sentence more natural and concise. Suggestion: use participle clauses for ongoing actions when no full relative clause is needed, and avoid 'the' with plural nouns when speaking generally.