Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Cần trả lời trực tiếp và mạch lạc hơn, bắt đầu bằng một câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi mới nêu lý do. Tránh lặp từ và câu rời rạc; dùng liên từ để nối ý (for example, because, so). Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: ai quyết định, ở bao nhiêu tuổi) để làm câu trả lời đáng tin hơn. Giữ độ dài tối đa 4-5 câu, ngữ pháp đơn giản nhưng chính xác.

Example: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents thought I wasn’t steady enough to ride on the road, so they didn’t buy one for me. Instead, I learned to ride a tricycle in the neighborhood until I was older. I remember being seven when I finally felt confident enough to try a real bike.

Suggestion: Cần tổ chức câu rõ ràng: nêu quan điểm trực tiếp, sau đó giải thích với lý do và ví dụ cụ thể. Tránh ngập ngừng và các cụm từ không chính xác (ví dụ: "ready by"). Dùng từ vựng phù hợp (commute, exercise, daily habit) và liên từ (because, for example, therefore) để làm cho câu mạch lạc hơn. Giữ 2–4 câu rõ ràng.

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in Vietnam. Many people cycle in the morning for exercise and short trips because it is cheap and convenient. For example, I often see commuters and students riding bikes to work or school, especially in smaller cities.

× Well, then I guess because where was the little girl? It has been for a long time and maybe I don't remember clearly, but I'm, I think when I was a child, I don't have a bike.

✓ Well, I guess it's been a long time and I don't remember clearly, but I think when I was a child I didn't have a bike.

The original contains confusing fragments and incorrect tense and word order. 'Where was the little girl?' is irrelevant and should be removed. 'It has been for a long time' is awkward; use 'it's been a long time' or 'it's been a long time since then'. The clause 'when I was a child, I don't have a bike' mixes past context with present tense 'don't'; change to past tense 'didn't'. Improve cohesion by reordering to a clear main clause followed by the reason. Suggestions: remove irrelevant fragments, use correct past tense for childhood actions, and use natural time expressions like 'it's been a long time'.

× I didn't have a bike because my parents didn't believe that I can control.

✓ I didn't have a bike because my parents didn't believe that I could control it.

The main clause is past tense ('didn't have'), so the subordinate clause should use a past form as well. 'Can' is present modal; use 'could' for past ability/possibility. Also include the object 'it' to clarify what 'control' refers to. Suggestion: match tense between clauses and include necessary objects for clarity.

× Yeah, of course in my country Vietnam, we, we are ready by for every morning to improve our health and maybe it's becomes our habits or our daily life actually.

✓ Yeah, of course in my country, Vietnam, we are ready every morning to improve our health, and maybe it has become a habit or part of our daily life.

Multiple issues: unnecessary filler 'by' is incorrect; 'are ready every morning' is acceptable but 'ready by for every morning' is ungrammatical. 'It's becomes' mixes present contraction with wrong verb form; use 'it has become' or 'it has become a habit'. Use singular 'a habit' rather than plural 'habits' after 'become'. Also 'our daily life' is better phrased 'part of our daily life'. Suggestions: remove extra fillers, use correct verb forms (has become), and use natural collocations like 'a habit' and 'part of daily life'.