Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar and fluency, give a clear topic sentence and one or two supporting details. Correct verb forms (use past tense consistently), avoid minor redundancy, and keep answer within 3–4 short sentences. Add a linking word to connect ideas (e.g., “and” or “so”).

Example: Yes. I got my first bike when I was about four years old, and my parents gave it to me. It was pink, so I loved it, and I often rode it with my brother around our neighbourhood.

Suggestion: Work on clarity, reduce hesitation fillers (uh), use correct grammar and clearer vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two concise, specific reasons linked with connectors (e.g., “because,” “so,” “therefore”). Avoid awkward phrasing like “can't be wasted” and use accurate collocations such as “save fuel” and “harm the environment.”

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and efficient way to commute. For example, they help save fuel and reduce traffic congestion, so they are better for the environment than cars.

× My parents give it to me and I like it a lot because it was pink in color.

✓ My parents gave it to me and I liked it a lot because it was pink.

The sentence mixes past and present tenses while describing a past event. 'Give' and 'like' should be in the past tense ('gave', 'liked') to match 'I got my first bike when I was about four years old.' Also, 'in color' is redundant when describing the color; simply 'pink' is natural. Suggestion: keep all verbs in the past when narrating past experiences and remove unnecessary words.

× Uh, yes, bikes are very popular in my country because uh, it is a mode of commuting, uh, by which the sources like fuel and petroleum can't be wasted, which often uh, detriment our environment.

✓ Uh, yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are a mode of commuting by which resources like fuel and petroleum are not wasted, which often damages our environment.

Several issues: pronoun agreement and verb tense/use. 'It is a mode' should be 'they are a mode' because 'bikes' is plural (subject-verb agreement; present tense). 'The sources' is incorrect; use 'resources'. 'Can't be wasted' is awkward for general statements; use 'are not wasted'. 'Detriment' is a noun, but the sentence needs a verb; use 'damages' to show the effect on the environment. Suggestion: ensure plural subjects use plural verbs and choose verbs rather than nouns when indicating an action.

× Also, it is environment friendly.

✓ Also, it is environmentally friendly.

'Environment friendly' uses an adjective and a noun incorrectly. The correct adverbial adjective form is 'environmentally friendly' to describe how something affects the environment. Also, 'it' should refer to 'bikes' (plural) if kept consistent: 'they are environmentally friendly.' Suggestion: use 'environmentally friendly' and maintain subject number consistency.