Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be direct and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct word choice (bike not bite), and fix pronouns. Add one brief supporting detail with a linking word. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

Example: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. It was too expensive for my family at the time, and my mother was worried I might get hurt. As a result, I learned to enjoy walking and playing other games instead.

Suggestion: Answer directly, remove fillers (umm, do you know), and use clear linking words. Give a concise opinion and one specific reason or example. Use correct comparative phrasing (e.g. "one of the most popular"). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: Yes, I think cycling is becoming very popular in my country. For example, many cities have added bike lanes and people cycle for exercise and commuting, making it one of the most popular sports and activities now.

× No, I didn't because when I was a child I didn't have the chance to have a bite because it was too expensive and my mother didn't want myself to get a scratch from.

✓ No, I didn't, because when I was a child I didn't have the chance to have a bike because it was too expensive and my mother didn't want me to get a scratch.

Errors: 'have a bite' is a wrong word choice (should be 'bike') and 'myself' is an incorrect reflexive pronoun; use 'me'. Also 'get a scratch from' is ungrammatical; say 'to get a scratch'. Suggestion: Use correct noun 'bike', replace 'myself' with 'me', and place the infinitive phrase 'to get a scratch' after 'want me'. Keep commas to separate clauses.

× As I grew older, I think umm, having a bike or umm, do do you know the sports called cycling? Umm, I think it's popular right now. Probably one of the third popular, umm, sports, and usually a lot of them.

✓ As I grew older, I think having a bike, or the sport of cycling, became more popular. I think it is one of the top three most popular sports, and many people do it.

Issues fixed: sentence was disfluent and contained repetition and wrong phrases. 'Do do you know the sports called cycling?' is broken; replace with 'the sport of cycling'. 'Probably one of the third popular' is incorrect comparative/superlative and order; use 'one of the top three most popular'. Also 'and usually a lot of them' is unclear; change to 'many people do it'. Suggestions: remove filler words, organize ideas into clear clauses, use correct comparative structure 'one of the top three most popular', and use precise subjects (many people) and verbs (do it).