Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words (uh, um) and repetition. Also correct tense and small grammar points (use past tense: had; say "in the afternoons" instead of "at afternoon").

Example: No, I didn’t have my own bike as a child. My father bought a bike for my brother, but I often borrowed it and rode around our neighbourhood in the afternoons to relax and play with friends.

Suggestion: Give a clear opening sentence and then provide specific reasons or examples. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g. "rather than cars" not "buy car", use "in the afternoons"). Use linking words like "because" or "for example" to make your answer coherent. Avoid repetition and fillers.

Example: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in rural areas. For example, in my village many teenagers aged 12 to 18 own bikes because they are cheaper than cars and convenient for short trips in the afternoons.

× Actually, I don't have a bike, but uh, I, my father bought a bike for my, uh, brother and uh, most of the time, uh, I borrowed his, uh, bike and spent time enjoying, enjoying, especially at afternoon.

✓ Actually, I didn't have a bike, but my father bought a bike for my brother, and most of the time I borrowed his bike and spent time enjoying it, especially in the afternoons.

The student's answer mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. The question asks about having a bike when you were a child (past), so use past tense consistently: 'didn't have' instead of 'don't have', 'borrowed' and 'spent' are correct past forms. Also fix articles and preposition: 'at afternoon' is incorrect; use 'in the afternoons'. Include the object 'it' after 'enjoying' for completeness. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with the time reference, use 'didn't have' for past negation and 'in the afternoons' for habitual past time.

× Yes, buy car popular in my country, especially in my region or the village where I where I live, uh, a lot of boys around uh 12 till 18 years, they have their own bikes on the afternoon they uh, use their B.

✓ Yes, cars are popular in my country, especially in my region or the village where I live. A lot of boys around 12 to 18 years old have their own bikes; in the afternoons they use them.

This sentence has multiple problems but primarily incorrect conjunction/connection and sentence structure. 'Buy car popular' is ungrammatical; use 'cars are popular' (subject-verb agreement and plural). Remove repeated phrase 'where I where I live'. Use '12 to 18 years old' for age range and 'have' for possession. 'On the afternoon' should be 'in the afternoons' and refer back with 'them' for bikes. Suggestion: split into two clear sentences, ensure subject-verb agreement for plural nouns ('cars are'), correct age expression, and use proper prepositions for time.