Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, correct grammar and finish your idea. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct articles and tense usage.

Example: No, I didn't. We lived on the fifth floor of a flat and there were usually no elevators, so we had nowhere safe to store a bicycle. For that reason only my brother, who often played outside, was allowed to keep one.

Suggestion: Provide a clear topic sentence, use linking words for coherence, and add a specific example or reason to support your view. Fix minor grammar and make sentences more natural and varied in vocabulary.

Example: Yes, I think bicycles are very popular these days. For example, I often see children and adults of all ages cycling on my street, and the city has added dedicated bike lanes on many roads, which has encouraged more people to ride.

× I didn't have bike when I was a kid because we lived in in a flat on the 5th floor and the time usually there were no elevators, so we didn't have any space, any safe space to keep the to keep the bike.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a kid because we lived in a flat on the 5th floor and at that time there usually were no elevators, so we didn't have any safe space to keep the bike.

Missing and incorrect articles: 'a bike' requires the indefinite article 'a'. 'in in a flat' has a duplicate preposition; use 'in a flat'. 'the time' should be 'at that time' to indicate a specific period. Redundant phrase 'any space, any safe space' simplified to 'any safe space'. Also remove the repeated 'to keep the'. Suggestions: always check whether a singular countable noun needs 'a' or 'the', avoid duplicate words, and use 'at that time' for past time references.

× And only my brother he was allowed because he.

✓ And only my brother was allowed to, because he needed it.

Pronoun and sentence fragment issue: 'my brother he was allowed' is redundant; either 'my brother was allowed' or 'he was allowed'. The original ends with 'because he.' which is a sentence fragment lacking a verb or clause. Correction completes the idea with 'because he needed it.' Suggestion: avoid repeating subject pronouns and ensure subordinate clauses are complete.

× When I go out in my street I can see many boys and girls riding their bikes of different age groups.

✓ When I go out on my street I can see many boys and girls riding their bikes from different age groups.

Preposition and phrasing: use 'on my street' not 'in my street'. 'of different age groups' is less natural than 'from different age groups'. Tense 'go out' and 'can see' are acceptable for habitual present. Suggestion: use 'on' with streets and prefer 'from' to indicate groups.

× And also we have a separate path. Path is for bikes in the city now on most of the roads.

✓ Also, we now have a separate bike path on most roads in the city.

Article and word order issues: 'a separate path. Path is for bikes' is repetitive and awkward; combine into one sentence. Use 'a separate bike path' and 'on most roads' instead of 'in the city now on most of the roads.' Suggestion: combine related clauses, place modifiers (now) appropriately, and use articles with singular countable nouns.