Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve tense consistency, remove filler words, and make sentences more concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and long pauses/fillers (you know, uh).

Example: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. My father gave it to me for my sixth birthday, and it was pink with two small mirrors. At first it had training wheels because I couldn’t ride on my own, but I learned to cycle within a few months.

Suggestion: Make the opinion clearer and use better organization: state your opinion, give specific reasons and examples, and finish with a short concluding sentence. Use linking words (however, because, therefore). Avoid vague phrasing and grammatical errors.

Example: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country nowadays because most people prefer cars and motorbikes for convenience and speed. Also, public transport such as buses and trains is widely available in cities, so many commute that way instead. Therefore, cycling is mostly seen among enthusiasts rather than everyday commuters.

× Yes, I do remember I have a bike when I was small.

✓ Yes, I do remember I had a bike when I was small.

The sentence mixes present simple ('I have') with a past time reference ('when I was small'). Use past tense 'had' to match the past timeframe. Suggestion: keep verb tense consistent with time expressions (use past for past situations).

× My father, he gifted me on my 6th birthday, it was a pinker bike that had two small, you know, back mirrors and also had like 2 small wheels at the back of the cycle for the support.

✓ My father gifted me one on my 6th birthday; it was a pink bike that had two small rear mirrors and two small wheels at the back of the cycle for support.

Problems include redundant subject 'My father, he' and nonstandard comparative 'pinker' used incorrectly; 'pinker' implies comparison but likely intended 'pink'. Also use 'rear mirrors' instead of 'back mirrors' and 'one' to avoid repeating 'bike'. Remove filler phrases. Ensure third-person singular verb 'gifted' is correct in past tense; avoid redundant pronoun after subject. Suggestion: omit extra pronoun, use correct adjective form, and choose precise nouns ('rear' and 'two').

× Because at that time I was not able to, you know, uh, do cycling.

✓ At that time I was not able to ride a bicycle.

Starting the sentence with 'Because' creates a sentence fragment and filler words make it informal. 'Do cycling' is unidiomatic in this context; use 'ride a bicycle' or 'cycle'. Also remove filler phrases ('you know, uh'). Suggestion: use a complete sentence and a natural verb collocation such as 'ride a bicycle'.

× I don't think bikes are really popular in my country nowadays because they prefer more the ones transportation like cars and you know motorbikes.

✓ I don't think bikes are very popular in my country nowadays because people prefer other means of transportation like cars and motorbikes.

The original mixes subjects: 'they prefer' lacks a clear antecedent; use 'people' as the subject. 'Prefer more the ones transportation' is ungrammatical word order and word choice. Replace with 'prefer other means of transportation'. Also avoid filler 'you know'. Suggestion: use clear subject and natural word order: 'people prefer other means of transportation'.

× But there are also the availability of using the public transportation like buses and trains.

✓ But public transportation such as buses and trains is also available.

'There are also the availability of using' is ungrammatical. Use 'public transportation is available' or 'there is also availability of public transportation'. Also 'public transportation' is an uncountable noun, so singular verb 'is' is required. Suggestion: simplify to 'public transportation is available' or 'there is also public transportation such as buses and trains'.

× So I don't think people a lot now prefer using the bikes because.

✓ So I don't think a lot of people prefer using bikes now.

Word order is incorrect ('people a lot now') and the sentence ends with an incomplete clause ('because') with no reason provided. Remove the trailing 'because' or supply a reason. Suggestion: reorder to 'a lot of people prefer using bikes now' and eliminate the unfinished conjunction or complete the thought (e.g., 'because they find other options more convenient').