Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar (use past tense consistently), remove filler words, tighten sentences and add a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Keep answers natural and under five sentences. Use linking words like “usually” or “and” correctly.

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I usually rode it every evening with my babysitter and we would cycle around our neighborhood. I especially enjoyed watching the sunset while riding because it was peaceful and the sky looked beautiful.

Suggestion: Work on grammar (subject–verb agreement, tense), reduce hesitations, be more specific and organized: give a direct opinion then two clear reasons with linking words (e.g., “because”, “however”). Avoid vague phrases like “child core things.”

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in Indonesia. Many families buy bicycles for children because they are affordable and fun for outdoor play. However, popularity can vary by income, since some families cannot afford to buy new bikes.

× Yes, I do have a bike when I was a child and I always use it every.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I always used it.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so past simple should be used: 'had' and 'used'. Also 'every' is incomplete and unnecessary here. Improve by keeping consistent past tense for actions that happened in childhood. Suggestion: Use past simple for both possession and habitual actions in the past: 'I had a bike when I was a child and I always used it.'

× Every evening, uh, usually with my, uh, babysitter and I just walk around my house and I love seeing the sunset while I'm riding the bike.

✓ Every evening I usually rode with my babysitter and walked around my neighborhood, and I loved seeing the sunset while I was riding my bike.

Tense consistency error: the sentence describes habitual past actions, so use past simple ('rode', 'walked', 'loved') and past continuous for 'while I was riding'. Also 'walk around my house' is unnatural for riding a bike, so 'neighborhood' fits better. Use 'my bike' rather than 'the bike' for possession. Suggestion: Maintain past tense for routines in childhood and use past continuous for actions happening simultaneously: 'I loved seeing the sunset while I was riding my bike.'

× Yes, it is so popular on my country because I think like everyone in Indonesia have uh has a bike when they was uh, when they were a child because it was such a child core things and it's just so fun to do with it.

✓ Yes, they are very popular in my country because I think almost everyone in Indonesia had a bike when they were a child since it was a typical childhood activity and it was fun.

Multiple issues: 'it is so popular on my country' should be 'they are very popular in my country' because 'bikes' is plural and the preposition is 'in'. Use past tense 'had' and 'were' for childhood. 'Child core things' is incorrect word choice; use 'typical childhood activity'. Also avoid saying 'do with it'—use 'it was fun'. Suggestion: Match plural subject and verb, use correct preposition 'in', and use past tense when referring to childhood: 'Bikes are very popular in my country.'

× But I think it depends on their money yes.

✓ But I think it depends on their financial situation.

Awkward phrase 'depends on their money' and casual filler 'yes'. Use a more natural noun phrase 'financial situation' or 'family income'. Keep present tense 'depends' because this is a general statement. Suggestion: Use natural collocations for socioeconomic references: 'depends on their family's income' or 'depends on their financial situation.'