Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời ngắn gọn, trực tiếp nhưng thiếu phát triển ý và chi tiết. Hãy mở rộng bằng một câu chủ đề ngắn rồi thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: ai tặng, loại xe, kỷ niệm liên quan, tần suất sử dụng) và dùng liên từ để nối ý cho tự nhiên hơn.

Example: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle that my parents bought me for my eighth birthday, and I used it almost every day to ride to school and play with my friends. It was a simple bike but I remember feeling very proud of it, especially when I learned to ride without training wheels.

Suggestion: Câu trả lời rõ ràng, có câu chủ đề và chi tiết hỗ trợ. Tuy nhiên có thể cải thiện bằng cách dùng thêm một liên từ để tăng tính mạch lạc, bổ sung một ví dụ số liệu hoặc so sánh cụ thể, và tránh một chút lặp từ (ví dụ 'great way' và 'mode of transport' cùng ý).

Example: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For instance, many people cycle around Westlake at weekends because it is relaxing and a good form of exercise, and moreover it is both cost-effective and environmentally friendly compared with driving. In recent years, more bike lanes have been added, which has encouraged even more people to cycle.

× Many people cycle around Westlake at weekends because it is relaxing and a great way to exercise, and it is also a cost effective and environmentally friendly mode of transport.

✓ Many people cycle around Westlake at the weekends because it is relaxing and a great way to exercise, and it is also a cost-effective and environmentally-friendly mode of transport.

The sentence needs the definite article 'the' before 'weekends' in this context (British English commonly uses 'at the weekends'). Additionally, 'cost effective' and 'environmentally friendly' should be hyphenated when used as compound adjectives before a noun: 'cost-effective' and 'environmentally-friendly'. Hyphens clarify that the adjectives modify 'mode'. Suggestion: use 'at the weekends' (or 'on weekends' in American English) and hyphenate compound adjectives before nouns.