Part 1
Examiner
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidate
Yes, I received it as a birthday present from my parents when I was 7. I used to write a every afternoon with my friend around my neighborhood and it make me very healthy and maybe more independent.
Examiner
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidate
Yeah, sure. In most of Chinese family they always give children a bike to let them exercise because the sport is good for health.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Score: 60.0Suggestion: 语法与用词需改进,回答要更简洁且条理清楚。注意时态一致(过去时),纠正拼写与语法错误(例如 write → ride,it make → it made),并用连接词使句子连贯。同时可加一两处具体细节(比如骑行的频率或记忆中的某个场景)来丰富内容。回答不要超过5句。
Example: Yes, I did. My parents gave me a bike for my seventh birthday, and I rode it every afternoon with a friend around our neighborhood. Riding regularly kept me fit and taught me some independence because I learned to go places on my own. I especially remember practicing turns near the small park until I felt confident.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Score: 65.0Suggestion: 用词与句子结构需更自然准确,避免口语化缩略(如 "Yeah, sure" 可换为 "Yes")。注意名词单复数和冠词("most Chinese families" 而不是 "most of Chinese family")。可给出具体原因或例子并使用连接词(for example, because, so)使表达更具说服力。控制在不超过5句。
Example: Yes, I think bikes are still quite popular in my country. Many Chinese families buy bikes for their children because cycling is a healthy form of exercise and is affordable. For example, children often ride to school or play with friends in parks, which helps them stay active.
× I used to write a every afternoon with my friend around my neighborhood and it make me very healthy and maybe more independent.
✓ I used to ride a bike every afternoon with my friend around my neighborhood, and it made me very healthy and perhaps more independent.
句子中“write a”显然是拼写/用词错误,应为“ride a bike”。此外存在时态与主谓一致错误:原句用了“I used to”表示过去习惯,后半句应使用过去时“made”,而不是“make”。另外在并列时需在逗号后加连词“and”。建议:1) 将“write a”改为“ride a bike”;2) 保持过去习惯时态,后半句动词用过去式“made”;3) 在并列句中使用合适的连接词和标点。
× In most of Chinese family they always give children a bike to let them exercise because the sport is good for health.
✓ In most Chinese families they always give their children a bike so that they can exercise, because cycling is good for health.
原句存在主谓一致与名词数错误:“most of Chinese family”应为复数形式“most Chinese families”或“most of Chinese families”;主语与动词“give”后面缺少所有格代词更清晰地指代孩子,改为“their children”。此外短语“to let them exercise”更自然改为“so that they can exercise”;“the sport”指代不明确,改为“cycling”。建议:1) 将“family”改为复数“families”;2) 使用“their children”明确所有关系;3) 用“so that they can exercise”表达目的;4) 用“cycling”替换不明确的“the sport”。