Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 문장이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있으며 세부 정보가 부족합니다. 먼저 주어와 관사를 정확히 사용하세요(예: “when I was a child”). 간단한 주제문을 말한 뒤 하나나 두 개의 구체적 세부사항(예: 얼마나 자주 탔는지, 누구에게 배웠는지, 어디에서 탔는지)을 연결어로 이어 말하세요. 또한 불필요한 단어(예: "actually")는 제거하거나 적절히 사용하세요.

Example: Yes. I had a bicycle when I was a child. I usually rode it in the neighborhood park every afternoon, and my older brother taught me how to balance and pedal. As a result, I became confident riding on my own.

Suggestion: 문법과 표현이 부정확하고 반복(“public public”)과 어순 오류("is every using")가 있습니다. 먼저 명확한 주제문을 말한 뒤 구체적 근거를 제시하세요(예: 통근용, 레저용, 도시 자전거 공유 시스템 등). 연결어(For example, In addition)를 사용해 논리를 이어주고, 어휘는 정확하게 사용하세요("public bicycle system" 또는 "bike-sharing system" 등).

Example: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my city. For example, many people use them for commuting, and there is a widely used bike-sharing system that makes cycling convenient and affordable.

× Yeah, actually I rode a bike when I was kid by myself.

✓ Yeah, actually I rode a bike when I was a kid by myself.

The article 'a' is missing before 'kid'. In English, 'kid' as a singular countable noun requires an article ('a' or 'the'). Add 'a' to make the noun phrase grammatically correct. Suggestion: always include the correct article with singular countable nouns (e.g., 'a child', 'a kid').

× Yeah, I think riding a bike is popular in my city and umm, public public bicycle system is every using.

✓ Yeah, I think riding a bike is popular in my city and, umm, the public bicycle system is used by everyone.

This sentence has multiple issues addressed under the allowed problem type. The definite article 'the' is needed before 'public bicycle system' because a specific system is implied. The phrase 'is every using' is incorrect word order and word choice; use passive 'is used by everyone' or active 'everyone uses'. Also remove the duplicated 'public'. Suggestion: use 'the' for a specific system and prefer 'is used by everyone' or 'everyone uses the public bicycle system.'