Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more accurate with tense and word choice, reduce repetition, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus two supporting details. Use linking words (for example, "because" or "so") and avoid conflicting time phrases (e.g., "after I went to sleep"). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought me a pink, Barbie‑style bike, and I rode it every afternoon after school because it was my favorite toy. I also often shared it with my friends, so we would play together in the neighborhood.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons and use linking words (for example, "however" or "because"). Avoid filler words like "umm" and use correct phrasing (e.g., "generations have changed" and "electric bikes"). Keep it concise and specific.

Example: Yes, bikes remain popular in the Philippines, especially for short trips and exercise. However, in recent years many people have switched to electric bikes because they are faster and easier to use for commuting. As a result, the cycling market is becoming more diverse.

× Yes, I have a bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike.

The examiner asked about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. Use 'had' to match the time frame and maintain consistency with the rest of the past narrative. Suggestion: Use past simple for finished past situations (I had, I went, I used to).

× When I was a child I remember my parents bought me one and the design is so Barbie.

✓ When I was a child I remember that my parents bought me one and the design was very Barbie-like.

Mixes present ('remember') with past events; 'remember' can be present if recalling now but needs 'that' for clarity. 'Bought' is correct past tense. 'is so Barbie' is incorrect: use past tense 'was' to describe past design and form an adjective with '-like'. Suggestion: Use 'I remember that my parents bought me one' and 'the design was very Barbie-like.'

× I used to play it every afternoon after I went to sleep.

✓ I used to ride it every afternoon after school.

'Play it' is odd for riding a bike; common collocation is 'ride a bike.' 'After I went to sleep' contradicts 'afternoon' and is illogical; likely intended 'after school.' Also keep 'used to' for past habitual actions. Suggestion: Use appropriate verbs and logical time expressions: 'used to ride it every afternoon after school.'

× And also I I I'm willingly to share that bike to my playmates whenever they're around.

✓ Also, I was willing to share that bike with my playmates whenever they were around.

Several errors: double words 'I I I'm'. 'Willingly' is an adverb; better use adjective 'willing.' For past situation use past tense 'was willing.' Preposition 'with' is correct for sharing; 'to' is incorrect. Use past tense 'they were' to match time frame. Suggestion: Say 'I was willing to share that bike with my playmates whenever they were around.'

× Yes bikes are still popular in our country the Philippines but unfortunately umm Gen. generation changes over time and the bike umm transfer it or evolve it into E bike.

✓ Yes, bikes are still popular in our country, the Philippines, but unfortunately generations change over time and bicycles have evolved into e-bikes.

Adjust punctuation and articles. 'Gen. generation' is redundant; use 'generations.' 'Change' should be plural 'change' referring to 'generations change.' 'the bike transfer it or evolve it' is ungrammatical: use 'bicycles have evolved into e-bikes' (present perfect to indicate change up to now). Remove unnecessary pronoun 'it.' Suggestion: Use 'generations change' and 'bicycles have evolved into e-bikes' to express gradual change over time.