Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise, avoid repetitions and hesitations, and use correct grammar and pronouns. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. For example, correct the tense and subject agreement ("my dad helped me"), remove filler words ("umm, I I"), and finish the sentence smoothly.

Example: Yes. I had a bike when I was a child. My dad helped make my dream come true and bought me a bright red bicycle when I was eight. Because I loved riding, I practiced every weekend with my friends and quickly became confident cycling around my neighborhood.

Suggestion: Clarify your ideas, correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., "bikes" not "buy"), and use linking words to connect points. Deliver a clear topic sentence, then give specific examples or reasons. Reduce hesitations and correct singular/plural and verb agreement ("it seems like many families have a bike at home").

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many families own at least one bicycle for commuting or running errands, and lots of people cycle for exercise and leisure on weekends. As a result, cities often have bike lanes and community cycling events.

× Oh yes, every driver in the world umm I I used to dream about my own personal bike when I was a child and my dad help helped me to make it come true.

✓ Oh yes, every driver in the world. I used to dream about my own personal bike when I was a child and my dad helped me to make it come true.

The verb 'help' should be in past tense 'helped' to match 'used to' and 'was' which indicate past time; this is a past tense issue but also specifically a third person singular past form 'helped'. Additionally the original has repetition and run-on structure; correcting punctuation and removing repeated words improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'helped' for past actions and separate ideas into two sentences.

× She he bought bought me a bicycle and.

✓ He bought me a bicycle.

The original contains conflicting pronouns 'She he' and repeated verb 'bought bought', creating confusion. The pronoun should match the referent 'my dad' which is male, so use 'He'. Remove the duplicated word and the trailing 'and' which leaves the sentence incomplete. Suggestion: proofread to ensure pronoun agreement and remove accidental repeats.

× Absolutely yes, I think by uh popular in my country, uh, it seem like every firm has their own buy in the house.

✓ Absolutely yes, I think bikes are popular in my country; it seems like every family has their own bike at home.

Multiple issues: 'by uh popular' is incorrect — use 'bikes are popular' (there be / present tense). 'It seem' should be 'it seems' to agree in third person singular (subject-verb agreement). 'Every firm' is wrong contextually; 'family' fits better. 'Buy in the house' is incorrect word choice; 'bike at home' is correct. Suggestion: use correct nouns ('bikes', 'family'), ensure third person singular verbs take -s ('seems'), and choose appropriate prepositions ('at home').

× They do buy for work and also for exercise.

✓ People buy them for work and also for exercise.

'They do buy' is awkward; better to use 'People buy them'. The original lacks a clear object ('them' referring to bikes). Also 'do' is unnecessary unless used for emphasis. Suggestion: include the object pronoun and use natural quantifiers/subjects like 'people'.