Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, then give 1–2 specific supporting details using linking words. Correct grammar (use plural/singular correctly and proper verb forms) and avoid repetition. For example, say whether bikes are popular, give a reason (e.g. cost, health, traffic), and provide a specific example or result.

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and practical. For example, many people cycle to work to avoid traffic, and children often ride to school in summer, which also helps them stay fit.

× Just bikes are really important for every country.

✓ Bicycles are really important for every country.

The original sentence has awkward word order and an informal noun choice. Replace 'Just bikes' with the subject 'Bicycles' to form a clear noun phrase that fits the topic. Also use the full word 'bicycles' rather than 'bikes' for more formal clarity. This fixes sentence structure (ID 26).

× It saves the gas and it is good for exercise and mostly kids in summer the kids are taking to school.

✓ They save gas, are good for exercise, and mostly children ride them to school in the summer.

The original sentence misuses pronouns and repeats 'kids' awkwardly. 'Bicycles' is plural, so use the plural pronoun 'they' (subject-pronoun agreement). Combine ideas with parallel structure: 'save gas,' 'are good for exercise,' and 'children ride them to school in the summer.' Use 'children' or 'kids' consistently and place time expression 'in the summer' at the end for clarity. This addresses pronoun use (ID 12) and sentence structure (ID 26).