Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and clearer: start with a direct topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and long run-on sentences. Use linking words (for example, because, so, although) to connect ideas and keep it within 2–4 sentences. Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'it's already broken' → 'it was already broken'; 'a four wheel bike' → 'a four-wheeled bike').

Example: Yes. I had a four-wheeled bike when I was about five, but it was already broken so I rarely rode it. Because it was too big for me and didn’t help me learn how to balance, I preferred walking or being pushed by my parents.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion first, then two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid contradictory phrases like 'somewhat... but no' and fix grammar (e.g., 'bike is' → 'bikes are'; 'bicycle lands' → 'bicycle lanes'). Be specific about where bikes are common and one suggestion for improvement. Keep it to 2–3 sentences for clarity.

Example: Bikes are fairly popular in Thailand, especially on university campuses and in parks. However, they are less common on main roads because there are few dedicated bicycle lanes, so if cities built more safe lanes, more people would cycle for short journeys.

× I used to have a bike when I was a child but it's already broken and it's a four wheel bike and it doesn't really teach me how to ride a bike and it's kind of big for my age when I was only 5 years old, so I don't really ride it.

✓ I used to have a bike when I was a child, but it was already broken and it was a four-wheel bike that didn't really help me learn to ride, and it was kind of big for me when I was only five years old, so I didn't really ride it.

Multiple past-tense events are described, so verbs should be consistently in the past. 'It's already broken' and 'it doesn't really teach me' wrongly use present tense; change to 'it was already broken' and 'didn't really help me learn' to match past context. Also change 'I don't really ride it' to 'I didn't really ride it.' Use 'four-wheel' with a hyphen as a compound adjective and 'help me learn to ride' is clearer than 'teach me how to ride.' Use numerals spelled out as 'five' in formal writing.

× I used to have a bike when I was a child but it's already broken and it's a four wheel bike and it doesn't really teach me how to ride a bike and it's kind of big for my age when I was only 5 years old, so I don't really ride it.

✓ I used to have a bike when I was a child, but it was already broken and it was a four-wheel bike that didn't really help me learn to ride, and it was kind of big for me when I was only five years old, so I didn't really ride it.

'Four wheel bike' should be 'four-wheel bike' as a single compound adjective modifying 'bike.' Also avoid redundant 'ride a bike' after already mentioning 'bike.' The correction uses singular/plural correctly and streamlines the sentence.

× I used to have a bike when I was a child but it's already broken and it's a four wheel bike and it doesn't really teach me how to ride a bike and it's kind of big for my age when I was only 5 years old, so I don't really ride it.

✓ I used to have a bike when I was a child, but it was already broken and it was a four-wheel bike that didn't really help me learn to ride, and it was kind of big for me when I was only five years old, so I didn't really ride it.

'Already broken' is acceptable but because the time frame is past, use 'was already broken' (past participle used with past 'was'). Using present 'it's already broken' conflicts with past narrative. Ensure past participle 'broken' pairs with past auxiliary 'was.'

× I think bike is somewhat popular in Thailand, but no.

✓ I think bicycles are somewhat popular in Thailand, but not really.

Use the plural 'bicycles' or the uncountable noun 'cycling' rather than singular 'bike' when speaking generally. Also 'but no' is informal/incorrect; use 'but not really' for clarity.

× But they rarely have a bicycle lane on the main road, mostly are on campus or in the park and I think it should be more popular if they were if there is like some bicycle lands.

✓ There are rarely bicycle lanes on main roads; they are usually found on campuses or in parks, and I think cycling would be more popular if there were more bicycle lanes.

Original has incorrect prepositions and noun forms: 'on the main road' -> 'on main roads' (general statement), 'mostly are on campus' -> 'they are usually found on campuses', 'in the park' -> 'in parks.' 'If they were if there is like some bicycle lands' is ungrammatical: use conditional 'if there were more bicycle lanes.' 'Bicycle lands' is incorrect noun; use 'bicycle lanes.' Also change sentence structure for clarity and correct subject-verb placement.

× But they rarely have a bicycle lane on the main road, mostly are on campus or in the park and I think it should be more popular if they were if there is like some bicycle lands.

✓ There are rarely bicycle lanes on main roads; they are usually on campuses or in parks, and I think cycling would be more popular if there were more bicycle lanes.

Start with 'There are' to correctly state existence. The original mixes subjects and lacks 'there' for existence. Using 'There are rarely bicycle lanes...' correctly conveys the idea. Use plural 'lanes' and plural locations 'main roads, campuses, parks.' Use subjunctive 'if there were' for hypothetical condition.