Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and avoid repetition and filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because/so). Also correct word choice (e.g., “rode” not “draw”) and aim for natural phrasing. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it every day to visit friends and go to the market because it was a convenient and inexpensive way to travel. As a result, I became quite confident cycling on busy streets.

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and repetition; use accurate verbs (e.g., “ride” not “write”) and give a specific reason or example. Begin with a direct statement, then add one clear supporting detail using a linking word (for example/for instance). Keep sentences short and natural.

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people commute to work and school by bicycle because they are cheap and practical, especially in rural areas like Kokan where roads are narrow and traffic is light.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child yes, I had a bike when I was a child and I used it uh, I, I draw it a lot because it made me like convenient to reach uh far places and it was very useful to me.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used it a lot because it made it convenient for me to reach far places, and it was very useful to me.

Past tense issue (ID 5): The student mixes past and present forms. 'draw' is present tense but the context requires past tense 'rode' or 'used'. Also 'made me like convenient' is ungrammatical; the correct phrasing is 'made it convenient for me'. Suggestions: use consistent past tense verbs for past events (e.g., 'I used it a lot' or 'I rode it a lot') and use the fixed expression 'made it convenient for me'. (Note: This correction addresses verbs to match past-time context and fixes wording for clarity.)

× Yes, I think umm, bikes are very popular in my country because most of us, most of people in my country, uh, write this in the streets. I see them every time and it's very popular, especially in Kokan, which is my motherland.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because most people ride them in the streets. I see them all the time, and they are especially popular in Kokan, which is my homeland.

Incorrect use of pronouns / word choice (ID 12): The student used awkward pronoun phrases 'most of us, most of people' and the wrong verb 'write' instead of 'ride'. Also 'I see them every time' is better as 'I see them all the time'. 'Motherland' is acceptable but 'homeland' is more natural here. Suggestions: use 'most people' for general statements, use the correct verb 'ride' for using bicycles, and keep pronouns consistent ('they are' to refer to bikes).