Part 1
Examiner
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Candidate
Yeah, I had to buy when I was a child. My parents put a pink bike to me. I think it is very beautiful and I like it very much.
Examiner
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Candidate
Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because. My country has a APP.
Did you have a bike when you were a child?
Score: 58.0Suggestion: 修改建议:回答应更自然、语法正确并更有条理。先用一句话直接回答,然后用一两句具体细节说明(例如谁买的、什么时候学会骑车、最喜欢的地方),避免冗余。注意时态(过去式)和常用搭配(e.g. “my parents bought me a pink bike”)。连词可用“and”或“because”来衔接。
Example: Yes, I did. My parents bought me a pink bike when I was seven, and I loved it because it looked pretty and was easy to ride. I practiced every weekend with my older brother and soon learned to ride without training wheels.
Do you think bikes are popular in your country?
Score: 45.0Suggestion: 修改建议:回答需要完整且具体。先直接回答,然后给出一到两条具体原因并用连词衔接(例如 because, for example, such as)。说明是什么让自行车流行(如共享单车、方便、环保、交通拥堵)。当前回答不完整且含糊,应补充细节并改正语法。
Example: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because many people use bike-sharing apps for short trips. For example, companies provide dockless bikes that you can unlock with your phone, which makes cycling very convenient and cheap.
× Yeah, I had to buy when I was a child.
✓ Yeah, I bought one when I was a child.
句子中使用了“had to buy”表示“不得不买”,但原意应为“我有一辆自行车/我买过一辆自行车”。应使用一般过去时的主动形式“bought”。建议改为“bought one”或“had a bike”。避免多余的“to”。
× My parents put a pink bike to me.
✓ My parents gave me a pink bike.
中文说明:这里不应使用“put ... to”来表达“把...给某人”。正确动词是“give”或短语“gave me”。因此应改为“gave me a pink bike”。另外注意时态与前句一致使用过去式“gave”。
× I think it is very beautiful and I like it very much.
✓ I thought it was very beautiful and liked it very much.
中文说明:叙述过去的经历时,主要从句应使用过去时以保持时态一致。原句用了现在时“think / is / like”,与前面“when I was a child”不一致。建议把动词改为过去式:thought / was / liked。也可根据语境保留现在时表达普遍看法,但更自然的是用过去时描述当时的感受。
× Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because.
✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country because they are convenient and cheap.
中文说明:句子以“because”结尾造成结构不完整,缺少原因从句。需要补充完整的原因从句,例如“because they are convenient and cheap”。保持时态为一般现在时以回答普遍事实。
× My country has a APP.
✓ My country has an app.
中文说明:在英语中,开头为元音音素的单词前应使用不定冠词“an”,而且“app”通常小写。原句使用“a APP”不正确,且大小写也不规范。应改为“an app”。