Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce redundancy, correct grammar, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Use linking words (however, because, so) and correct verb tenses and pronouns. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

Example: Yes, I had a bike as a child, but it had training wheels so it was practically a four-wheel bike. Because my mother was worried about safety, she never taught me to ride properly, and I still can't ride a two-wheeler. Instead, she encouraged me to take driving lessons for a car.

Suggestion: Make sentences more precise and correct incomplete phrases. Use linking words (for example, during, because) and add a specific example or statistic. Avoid vague endings and ensure coherence.

Example: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country, especially as a leisure activity. For example, several of my friends cycle regularly on weekends, and both men and women participate equally. During the pandemic, cycling grew in popularity because it was a safe outdoor activity, and in mountainous areas many people take regular rides for exercise and scenery.

× When I was a child I had a bike but with training wheels so technically it is a four wheel bike.

✓ When I was a child I had a bike with training wheels, so technically it was a four-wheel bike.

The sentence mixes past and present tense: 'When I was a child I had' is past, but 'it is a four wheel bike' is present. Maintain past tense by changing 'is' to 'was'. Also add a hyphen in 'four-wheel' as a compound adjective and remove unnecessary 'but'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and use hyphen for compound adjectives.

× Up until now I still don't know how to ride a bike and even my boyfriend I didn't know how to ride one since my mom won't let me and she told me just go for a drive lesson for a car.

✓ Until now I still don't know how to ride a bike, and even my boyfriend didn't know how to ride one, since my mom wouldn't let me and she told me to take driving lessons for a car.

Multiple tense and structure problems: 'Up until now' is acceptable but 'still don't know' (present) conflicts with 'didn't know' (past) in same clause; clarify time frames. The phrase 'even my boyfriend I didn't know' is ungrammatical; restructure to 'and even my boyfriend didn't know'. 'Won't let me' should be past 'wouldn't let me' to match past context. Use 'told me to take driving lessons' instead of 'told me just go for a drive lesson'. Suggestion: Keep time references consistent, place subjects and verbs in correct order, and use 'to' before verbs after 'told'.

× I have few friends who actually ride bikes and do it as a hobby.

✓ I have a few friends who actually ride bikes and do it as a hobby.

In English, 'few' without an article implies almost none; 'a few' means some. The intended meaning is that the speaker has some friends who ride bikes, so use 'a few'. Suggestion: Use 'a few' for a small number, 'few' for almost none.

× It is actually OK for both genders, male and female, and during the pandemic it was a very popular hobby.

✓ It is actually OK for both genders, male and female, and during the pandemic it became a very popular hobby.

Tense inconsistency: 'It is actually OK' (present) vs 'during the pandemic it was' (past). If referring to popularity during the pandemic, use 'became' to show change in past. Also 'OK' is informal; consider 'acceptable' or 'suitable' in formal contexts. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent and choose appropriate register.

× Since our area is actually going to a mountain, a lot of people are.

✓ Because our area is close to mountains, a lot of people ride bikes there.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear: 'is actually going to a mountain' doesn't make sense for an area. Also ending with 'a lot of people are' is incomplete. Recast sentence to explain that proximity to mountains leads to many people riding bikes. Use 'close to mountains' or 'near the mountains' and complete the verb phrase. Suggestion: Express location with 'near' or 'close to' and finish the action (e.g., 'ride bikes there').