Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar (past tense consistency), remove hesitations and repetitions, and use clearer linking. Begin with a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid filler sounds.

Example: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small blue bicycle with training wheels that my parents bought me. Because I rode it around the neighborhood every day, it gave me a sense of freedom and helped me develop confidence and balance.

Suggestion: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (subject-verb agreement), and provide specific reasons or examples using linking words. Avoid hesitations and vague phrases; explain what you mean by 'play' (ride) and give one supporting detail.

Example: Not really. Bicycles are less popular in my country because many people prefer cars for commuting, and the infrastructure for cyclists is limited. As a result, fewer children learn to ride regularly and biking is mostly a leisure activity rather than a common mode of transport.

× I have a bike when I was a child.

✓ I had a bike when I was a child.

The sentence mixes present tense 'have' with a past time expression 'when I was a child'. Use past tense 'had' to match the time frame. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for events in the past (had).

× It was a small blue bicycle with train, uh, with training wheels that my parents bought for me.

✓ It was a small blue bicycle with training wheels that my parents bought for me.

The word 'train' is incorrect and seems to be a slip; the correct noun is 'training wheels'. Remove the extra filler and use 'training wheels'. Suggestion: avoid filler words and proofread to remove wrong fragments.

× I loved reading it it around the the neighborhood because it gave me freedom and helped me build confidence and balance.

✓ I loved riding it around the neighborhood because it gave me freedom and helped me build confidence and balance.

The verb 'reading' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'riding'. There are also repeated words ('it it' and 'the the'). Fix the verb and remove duplicates. Suggestion: choose the verb that matches the activity (ride a bike) and proofread to eliminate repeated words.

× Uh, not that much because not everybody know that, uh, how to, umm, how to play.

✓ Uh, not that much because not everybody knows how to ride.

Subject-verb agreement: 'everybody' is singular and requires 'knows' (third person singular). Also 'know that how to play' is ungrammatical and unclear. Use 'knows how to ride' to express the idea clearly. Suggestion: use 'knows' with 'everybody' and a clear verb phrase like 'how to ride' rather than 'how to play' when referring to bicycles.