Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct tense and singular/plural errors, and avoid redundancy (e.g. “like to enjoy” → “enjoyed”).

Example: Yes, I had a bike as a child and I loved riding it with my dad. For example, every weekend my family and I would go to the park for a picnic, and I would ride my bike around the lake. That routine is one of my fondest childhood memories.

Suggestion: Give a clear direct answer, then explain with specific reasons and use linking words. Fix grammar (use plural/singular correctly, avoid literal translations like “truck” if you mean “train” or “bus”), and replace fillers ('umm'). Provide one or two concrete facts or comparisons.

Example: Yes, bicycles are common, but few people use them for daily travel. Instead, most residents prefer buses and the subway because the public transport network is extensive and convenient, and cycling infrastructure is limited in some areas.

× Yes, I really like to enjoy riding a bike, especially with my dad.

✓ Yes, I really enjoyed riding a bike, especially with my dad.

The student uses 'like to enjoy riding' which is redundant and awkward. The question asks about past habits ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?') so past tense is appropriate. Use 'enjoyed' (past simple) or 'liked' + gerund. Suggested correction uses 'really enjoyed riding' to be natural and grammatically correct.

× In Korea, I used to go to the park every weekend with my family and have a picnic and riding a bike.

✓ In Korea, I used to go to the park every weekend with my family, have a picnic, and ride a bike.

After 'used to' and in a list of activities, verbs should be in base form (ride) or parallel forms. 'Have a picnic and riding a bike' mixes 'have' (base) with 'riding' (‑ing). Make the verbs parallel: 'have a picnic and ride a bike.' Also maintain past habitual 'used to.'

× And that memory is one of my best childhood memory.

✓ And that memory is one of my best childhood memories.

The expression 'one of my best' requires a plural noun after it ('memories'). Using singular 'memory' is incorrect. Change to 'memories' to match 'one of' construction.

× Yes, it is a popular transport in my city, but people not usually take the bike, they rather to take a truck on bus or subway instead.

✓ Yes, bikes are a popular form of transport in my city, but people do not usually take bikes; they prefer to take a bus, truck, or the subway instead.

Multiple issues fixed while following allowed types: 'it is a popular transport' is awkward—use plural 'bikes are' and 'form of transport.' 'people not usually take' requires auxiliary 'do not' for present simple negation. 'they rather to take' should be 'they prefer to take' (no 'to' after 'rather' when structured differently). Also corrected 'on bus' to 'a bus' and added articles. These changes address third person/verb form and negation structure.

× Because there are a lot of umm fashionities such as station and underground system.

✓ Because there are a lot of facilities such as stations and an underground system.

The student used 'fashionities' which is incorrect; the intended word is 'facilities.' Also 'station' should be plural 'stations' when mentioning 'a lot of' and 'underground system' should have article 'an' or be plural depending on meaning. Corrected to 'stations and an underground system.'