Bike— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Improve grammar (past tense), pronunciation of key words, and sentence structure. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two brief supporting details using linking words. Be specific about ages and reasons. For example, use past simple: 'I didn't have a bike' and correct verb forms and word choice (buy → bike, didn't allow → didn't allow me).'

Example: I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents thought I was too young, so they promised to buy me one when I turned 18. As a result, I only started riding in my late teens.

Suggestion: Work on clarity and conciseness. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons and a linking word (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Avoid repetition (e.g., 'by car' twice) and correct small errors ('we they' → 'they'). Add one concrete example or comparison. Use varied vocabulary such as 'common', 'prefer', 'convenient', 'family trips'.

Example: Bikes are not very popular in my city. People usually prefer cars because they find them more convenient for family trips, and cars offer more comfort and safety. For instance, families often drive to the suburbs for weekend outings rather than cycling.

× To be very honest, in my childhood I don't have a buy because my parents didn't allowed me. Decide when you grow up and to be 18 we will give you the bike.

✓ To be very honest, in my childhood I didn't have a bike because my parents didn't allow me. They said, 'Decide when you grow up and when you are 18 we will give you a bike.'

Errors: present tense 'don't have' is incorrect for past context (use past tense); 'buy' is a typo for 'bike'; 'didn't allowed' is wrong because after 'did' the base form 'allow' must be used; sentence structure and reported speech are unclear. Suggestions: use past simple for past events ('didn't have'), use correct noun 'bike', use base verb after 'did' ('didn't allow'), and render reported speech clearly by either quoting or converting to reported speech ('they said that when I was 18 they would give me a bike').

× Unfortunately the bikes are not popular in my city because usually people prefer cars over bikes because we they have to travel with their families and they have to enjoy car driving by car, not by the bike.

✓ Unfortunately, bikes are not popular in my city because people usually prefer cars to bikes since they often travel with their families and enjoy driving a car rather than riding a bike.

Errors: redundant and incorrect pronoun 'we they'; awkward repetition 'because usually/ because'; wrong preposition 'prefer X over Y' is acceptable but 'prefer X to Y' is more natural here; 'enjoy car driving by car' is ungrammatical. Suggestions: remove redundancy, correct pronoun to 'they' or omit, use 'prefer cars to bikes' or keep 'prefer cars over bikes', and use natural phrasing 'enjoy driving a car rather than riding a bike' to express contrast.