Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答直接，主题明确。可以把“which needs a lot of practice”改为更自然的表达，并补充具体学习内容，例如主修乐器和练习时间。注意不要只说专业名称，要展示相关细节。

Example: I’m majoring in music performance, with classical piano as my main instrument. It involves plenty of daily practice, as well as classes in music theory and performance.

Suggestion: 观点明确，但“started the music”“my only happy have lasted”不符合英语语法，表达也不自然。可以说“started learning music”以及“the one passion that has stayed with me”。建议用“喜欢的原因+具体经历”来展开。

Example: Yes, absolutely. I started learning music when I was four, and it has been a constant source of happiness for me. Even when I feel stressed, playing the piano helps me relax and express my emotions.

Suggestion: 理由是合理的，但句子过长，且有明显语法问题，如“had learned”“I still it”和“after day of work and school”。应使用清晰结构：童年经历→选择钢琴→学习带来的好处。

Example: I chose this subject because I started learning both the piano and violin when I was four. I eventually chose piano as my major because I have a strong connection with it, and playing it helps me relax after a busy day.

Suggestion: 回答结构完整，有观点、现象和结论，逻辑连接也很好。可以避免“increasingly popular”和“more and more popular”重复，并明确说明是音乐专业还是音乐课程越来越受欢迎。

Example: Yes, I think music is becoming increasingly popular in my country. More and more students are taking music classes, especially to prepare for university entrance exams. As a result, music education is attracting greater public attention.

Suggestion: 计划具体，内容丰富。需要修正冠词和不自然表达：“do master's degree”应为“do a master’s degree”，“After not that”应为“After that”。还可以使用“performance skills”使表达更自然。

Example: Over the next five years, I plan to pursue a master’s degree in the UK to improve my classical piano performance. After that, I may apply for an artist diploma at a professional music school so that I can continue my advanced training.

Suggestion: 核心观点是自由和时间充足，但“can choose since I want to do”“such as travelling”及“If I just in full time work”语法错误较多。应直接说“choose what I want to do”，并用具体活动支持观点。

Example: One benefit of being my age is that I have quite a lot of freedom and flexibility. I can travel, cook, or learn new skills before starting a full-time job. Once I begin working, I may not have as much free time for these activities.

Suggestion: 回答直接，理由充分。注意“my majors”应为单数“my major”，“important and new techniques”语序不自然，可改为“valuable new techniques”。还可以说明音乐对未来目标的帮助。

Example: No, I definitely wouldn’t change my major. I’ve been studying music since I was four, and I still have a strong passion for it. My teachers have taught me many valuable techniques, so I’d like to continue developing my skills as a pianist.

Suggestion: 偏好和原因清楚，但“Such as”不能单独引出例子，“when I learning my health test”以及“in afternoon”存在语法问题。应使用“for example”并说明早晨学习效率更高。

Example: I prefer studying in the morning because I usually feel sleepy in the afternoon. For example, when I practise for an important test, I always do it before noon. I can concentrate much better at that time and remember things more easily.

Suggestion: 回答有清晰的时间对比和具体数字，内容有效。主要问题是“classes and well”表达不完整，以及“keep balance”应为“maintain a balance”。可以更自然地说“including classes and practice”。

Example: I spend about 40 hours a week on my studies. From Monday to Friday, I study for around eight hours a day, including classes and piano practice. At weekends, I only study for about four hours a day so that I can relax and recharge. I think maintaining a balance is important.

Suggestion: 回答有明确态度和个人例子，但“working can be quite tired”应改为“working can be quite tiring”，“However, it is impossible”意思不清。可以表达为虽然不期待高强度工作，但理解工作是未来必经阶段。

Example: Not particularly, to be honest. I’m worried that working full-time could be quite tiring because I often see my mother working until midnight. However, I know that having a job is an unavoidable part of adult life, so I’ll try to find a healthy work-life balance.

Suggestion: 回答切题，也提到了平台和用途，但“can learned”应为“can learn”，“direct my performing”不自然。建议减少犹豫词，并具体说明视频如何帮助你改进演奏。

Example: I often use Bilibili to watch online piano lectures and masterclasses. I can learn different techniques from professional pianists, such as how to control dynamics and phrasing. These videos help me improve my performance in the future.

Suggestion: 建议具体，且有现状、改进措施和效果。需要修正“hold a concert”前的表达以及“play in pieces in there”；应说“perform pieces there”。可以补充新场馆对学生和观众的好处。

Example: I’d like my university to build a large, modern concert hall. The current one is too small for major performances, so students and audiences often feel cramped. A better venue would allow us to perform more comfortably and give concerts a more professional atmosphere.

× Absolutely yes. I started the music when I was four years old. It's my only happy have lasted for so long time, so I really enjoy it.

✓ Absolutely yes. I started studying music when I was four years old. It is the only hobby that has made me happy for such a long time, so I really enjoy it.

“Music”表示音乐这一抽象概念时，通常不使用定冠词“the”。因此应说“started studying music”，而不是“started the music”。

× Absolutely yes. I started the music when I was four years old. It's my only happy have lasted for so long time, so I really enjoy it.

✓ Absolutely yes. I started studying music when I was four years old. It is the only hobby that has made me happy for such a long time, so I really enjoy it.

“my only happy have lasted”缺少正确的名词和完整的句子结构。“happy”不能在这里直接作名词使用。可以改为“the only hobby that has made me happy”，意思是“唯一一个让我开心了这么久的爱好”。

× Absolutely yes. I started the music when I was four years old. It's my only happy have lasted for so long time, so I really enjoy it.

✓ Absolutely yes. I started studying music when I was four years old. It is the only hobby that has made me happy for such a long time, so I really enjoy it.

“so long time”搭配错误。名词短语“a long time”前应使用“such”，所以应说“such a long time”；也可以说“so long”。

× Actually, since I was four years old I had learned piano and violin and now I still choose piano as my major because I still it really makes me relax after day of work and school.

✓ Actually, I started learning the piano and violin when I was four years old, and I still choose piano as my major because it really helps me relax after a day of work and school.

“had learned”是过去完成时，通常表示某个过去动作发生在另一个过去动作之前。这里是在说明从四岁开始学习的经历，使用一般过去时“started learning”更合适。

× Actually, since I was four years old I had learned piano and violin and now I still choose piano as my major because I still it really makes me relax after day of work and school.

✓ Actually, I started learning the piano and violin when I was four years old, and I still choose piano as my major because it really helps me relax after a day of work and school.

“because I still it really makes me relax”中的“still”和“it”位置错误，句子结构也不完整。应改为“because it really helps me relax”，其中“it”指学习钢琴。

× Actually, since I was four years old I had learned piano and violin and now I still choose piano as my major because I still it really makes me relax after day of work and school.

✓ Actually, I started learning the piano and violin when I was four years old, and I still choose piano as my major because it really helps me relax after a day of work and school.

“day”是可数名词单数，前面需要冠词。这里表示“一天的工作和学习之后”，应说“after a day of work and school”。

× I plan to do master's degree in the UK in the next few years because I want to improve my classical piano performance. After not that, I might apply for an artist diploma at a professional music school to continue my professional training.

✓ I plan to do a master's degree in the UK in the next few years because I want to improve my classical piano performance. After that, I might apply for an artist diploma at a professional music school to continue my professional training.

“master’s degree”是可数名词单数，前面需要不定冠词“a”，所以应说“do a master’s degree”。

× I plan to do master's degree in the UK in the next few years because I want to improve my classical piano performance. After not that, I might apply for an artist diploma at a professional music school to continue my professional training.

✓ I plan to do a master's degree in the UK in the next few years because I want to improve my classical piano performance. After that, I might apply for an artist diploma at a professional music school to continue my professional training.

“After not that”不是正确的英语表达。表示“之后”时应使用固定短语“After that”。

× At my age I just feel free because I can choose since I want to do such as travelling and cooking or learning some new skills.

✓ At my age, I feel free because I can choose what I want to do, such as travelling, cooking, or learning new skills.

“choose since I want to do”结构错误。表达“选择自己想做的事情”时，应使用“choose what I want to do”。“such as”后面列举活动时，要保持平行结构。

× If I just in full time work, I think I won't have a lot of time to do these things.

✓ If I were in full-time work, I think I wouldn't have a lot of time to do these things.

原句“If I just in full time work”缺少谓语动词。这里可以使用虚拟条件句“If I were...”，表示假设自己处于全职工作状态。

× I definitely wouldn't change my majors. I have been studying music since I was 4 and I have a strong passion for it.

✓ I definitely wouldn't change my major. I have been studying music since I was four, and I have a strong passion for it.

这里谈论的是一个专业，所以应使用单数“major”，而不是复数“majors”。

× Such as when I learning my health test, I choose the morning time and if I learn it in afternoon I will fall asleep.

✓ For example, when I am studying for my health test, I choose to study in the morning, and if I study in the afternoon, I will fall asleep.

“when I learning”缺少助动词“am”。现在进行时的结构是“主语 + am/is/are + 动词-ing”，所以应说“when I am studying”。

× Such as when I learning my health test, I choose the morning time and if I learn it in afternoon I will fall asleep.

✓ For example, when I am studying for my health test, I choose to study in the morning, and if I study in the afternoon, I will fall asleep.

“afternoon”是可数时间名词的单数形式，在这里需要定冠词“the”，因此应说“in the afternoon”。

× On weekdays I study about 8 hours a day because I have classes and well.

✓ On weekdays, I study about 8 hours a day because I have classes as well.

“and well”不能表达“也”。表示“也”时应使用固定短语“as well”，所以应说“have classes as well”。

× On weekends I only study about four hours a day so I can relax and recharge. It's important for me to keep balance.

✓ On weekends, I only study about four hours a day so I can relax and recharge. It's important for me to keep a balance.

“balance”在这里是可数概念，表示保持一种平衡，因此前面需要不定冠词“a”，即“keep a balance”。

× Actually, not really. I feel that working can be quite tired.

✓ Actually, not really. I feel that working can be quite tiring.

“tired”通常描述人的感受，表示“感到疲惫的”；“tiring”描述工作本身，表示“令人疲惫的”。这里主语是“working”，所以应使用“tiring”。

× I usually watch lectures on bilibili because I can learned a lot of umm different techniques about the piano and they can help me direct my performing in the future.

✓ I usually watch lectures on Bilibili because I can learn a lot of different piano techniques, and they can help me improve my performance in the future.

情态动词“can”后面必须接动词原形，因此应说“can learn”，不能说“can learned”。

× I would like my school to build a large modern concert hall. The current hall is too small to hold a concert. With a better concert hall, I think I will feel more excited when I play in pieces in there.

✓ I would like my school to build a large modern concert hall. The current hall is too small to hold a concert. With a better concert hall, I think I will feel more excited when I play pieces there.

“play pieces”表示“演奏乐曲”，中间不需要介词“in”。表示“在那里”时直接使用副词“there”，不需要再加“in”。