Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 最初に「学生である」と明確に答え、その後に専攻や現在の研究内容を2〜3文で説明すると、より自然で効果的です。「for four years」は「for four years」と単独で使うより、「I have been studying ... for four years」のように現在完了進行形と組み合わせます。また、「to go to school, I use bicycles」は質問への関連性が弱いため削除し、「I enjoy student life」のように自然な表現を使いましょう。

Example: I’m a university student studying electronic engineering. I’ve been studying it for four years, and I’m currently doing research for my graduation project. I’m particularly interested in power electronics, so I’m enjoying my university life.

Suggestion: 場所を直接答えた後、大学の位置と通学の便利さを説明するとよいです。「near from」は「near」、「which is living with my parents」は「where I live with my parents」、「commute the school」は「commute to school」に直してください。最後の「I really love the school」は、具体的な理由を加えると内容がより充実します。

Example: I study at a university in Chofu, which is quite close to my home. I live with my parents, so it’s easy for me to commute to campus. I like my university because it has a friendly atmosphere and excellent facilities.

Suggestion: 「Yes」と答えた後、静かな研究室を理由として述べる構成はよいですが、「lavratory」は「laboratory」、「with quite good environment」は「has a good environment」に直してください。「restaurant」は複数形の「restaurants」にし、最後の文を完結させる必要があります。「However」などの接続語を使い、大学周辺と駅周辺の違いを明確に比較しましょう。

Example: Yes, I think it’s a good place to study, especially my laboratory. It has a quiet environment because there aren’t many entertainment facilities nearby. However, the area around Chofu Station is much busier, with many restaurants and entertainment venues, so it can be a little distracting.

Suggestion: 変更したい内容は伝わりますが、回答が途中で終わっており、最も重要な要望を最後まで述べる必要があります。「I use small one」は「I use the smaller one」、「an water solver」は「a water dispenser」、「It is only placed in big room」は「There is one only in the larger room」と表現します。最初に希望を明確に述べ、次にその理由を説明すると、より論理的になります。

Example: Yes, I’d like to make one small change. There are two student rooms in my laboratory, but there is a water dispenser only in the larger one. I use the smaller room, so I’d like the university to install another water dispenser there. It would be more convenient, especially when I spend long hours doing research.

Suggestion: 将来の計画を具体的に述べており、内容と構成は比較的明確です。「Yolopian University」は実際の大学名を正確に発音・表記し、「do my master degree」は「complete a master’s degree」、「study more about the field」は「study power electronics in greater depth」、「work with the field」は「work in the transportation field」に直してください。さらに、なぜその分野を選ぶのかを1文加えると、内容の具体性が高まります。

Example: I’d like to study at a university in Europe and complete a master’s degree in power electronics. I want to deepen my knowledge of this field, particularly its applications in electric vehicles. In the future, I hope to work in the transportation industry and help develop more energy-efficient vehicles.

× I am a student I'm learning electronic engineering at university for four years and now I'm doing research for graduation to go to school I use bicycles and I really enjoy the life.

✓ I am a student. I have been studying electronic engineering at university for four years, and now I am doing research for my graduation. I cycle to school, and I really enjoy student life.

The action started four years ago and is still continuing, so the present perfect continuous tense, have been studying, is more appropriate than the present continuous, am learning. Use clear sentence boundaries to separate the ideas.

× I am a student I'm learning electronic engineering at university for four years and now I'm doing research for graduation to go to school I use bicycles and I really enjoy the life.

✓ I am a student. I have been studying electronic engineering at university for four years, and now I am doing research for my graduation. I cycle to school, and I really enjoy student life.

My graduation requires the possessive determiner my because the graduation belongs to the speaker. Student life is an uncountable general expression, so the definite article the is not needed.

× I am a student I'm learning electronic engineering at university for four years and now I'm doing research for graduation to go to school I use bicycles and I really enjoy the life.

✓ I am a student. I have been studying electronic engineering at university for four years, and now I am doing research for my graduation. I cycle to school, and I really enjoy student life.

The original response joins several independent ideas without suitable punctuation or conjunctions. Divide it into complete sentences and use and to connect closely related ideas.

× I study at the university located in Chofu city. It is near from my house which is living with my parents, so it's very easy to commute the school and I really love the school.

✓ I study at a university in Chofu City. It is near my house, where I live with my parents, so it is very easy to commute to school. I really like my university.

Near is followed directly by the location, not by from. The verb commute requires the preposition to when the destination is mentioned. Use live with my parents, not house which is living with my parents.

× I study at the university located in Chofu city. It is near from my house which is living with my parents, so it's very easy to commute the school and I really love the school.

✓ I study at a university in Chofu City. It is near my house, where I live with my parents, so it is very easy to commute to school. I really like my university.

The relative word where correctly refers to the place, my house. The original structure incorrectly makes the house perform the action of living.

× I study at the university located in Chofu city. It is near from my house which is living with my parents, so it's very easy to commute the school and I really love the school.

✓ I study at a university in Chofu City. It is near my house, where I live with my parents, so it is very easy to commute to school. I really like my university.

Use a university when introducing the university for the first time. School can be used without an article when referring to school as an institution or regular destination.

× I study at the university located in Chofu city. It is near from my house which is living with my parents, so it's very easy to commute the school and I really love the school.

✓ I study at a university in Chofu City. It is near my house, where I live with my parents, so it is very easy to commute to school. I really like my university.

The original sentence contains an incorrectly formed relative clause and several ideas connected awkwardly. Use a complete clause, where I live with my parents, and separate the ideas clearly.

× Yes, especially my lavratory with quite good environment to study because there are no amusement facilities near there.

✓ Yes, especially my laboratory, which has quite a good environment for studying, because there are no amusement facilities nearby.

Use the indefinite article a before the singular countable noun environment. The phrase for studying is the natural structure for describing the purpose of an environment.

× Yes, especially my lavratory with quite good environment to study because there are no amusement facilities near there.

✓ Yes, especially my laboratory, which has a quite good environment for studying, because there are no amusement facilities nearby.

The adjective good should modify the noun environment through the phrase a quite good environment. For studying is more natural than to study after environment in this context.

× But near the Zhoufu station there are a lot of restaurant and entertainment facilities so it's a bit.

✓ But near Chofu Station, there are a lot of restaurants and entertainment facilities, so it is a bit noisy.

After a lot of, a plural countable noun is required, so restaurant must become restaurants. The final clause must be completed with an adjective such as noisy.

× But near the Zhoufu station there are a lot of restaurant and entertainment facilities so it's a bit.

✓ But near Chofu Station, there are a lot of restaurants and entertainment facilities, so it is a bit noisy.

When using a proper place name such as Chofu Station, the definite article is generally omitted. The clause also needs a complement after is a bit.

× But near the Zhoufu station there are a lot of restaurant and entertainment facilities so it's a bit.

✓ But near Chofu Station, there are a lot of restaurants and entertainment facilities, so it is a bit noisy.

The ending so it is a bit is incomplete because bit needs a following adjective or noun phrase. Adding noisy makes the sentence grammatically complete.

× There are two student rooms in my laboratory and I use small one and the small student room has an water solver. It is only placed in big room. So if possible, I'd like to place new water solver to my.

✓ There are two student rooms in my laboratory. I use the smaller one, and it has a water solver. The water solver is located only in the larger room. If possible, I would like to place a new water solver in my room.

Singular countable nouns need suitable articles or determiners: the smaller one, a water solver, the larger room, and a new water solver. The article an cannot be used before water because water begins with a consonant sound.

× There are two student rooms in my laboratory and I use small one and the small student room has an water solver. It is only placed in big room.

✓ There are two student rooms in my laboratory. I use the smaller one, and it has a water solver. The water solver is located only in the larger room.

It is only placed is an unnatural passive construction here. Use the water solver is located to state its position clearly. The passive form is appropriate only when the focus is on where the object is positioned.

× There are two student rooms in my laboratory and I use small one and the small student room has an water solver. It is only placed in big room. So if possible, I'd like to place new water solver to my.

✓ There are two student rooms in my laboratory. I use the smaller one, and it has a water solver. The water solver is located only in the larger room. If possible, I would like to place a new water solver in my room.

Use in when describing the location of an object inside a room. The verb place also takes in for the destination in this context, not to my.

× There are two student rooms in my laboratory and I use small one and the small student room has an water solver. It is only placed in big room. So if possible, I'd like to place new water solver to my.

✓ There are two student rooms in my laboratory. I use the smaller one, and it has a water solver. The water solver is located only in the larger room. If possible, I would like to place a new water solver in my room.

The original response contains several clauses joined with and and ends with an incomplete phrase, to my. Divide the information into complete sentences and finish the final phrase with room.

× I'd like to study in Yolopian University to do my master degree and I'd like to study more about the field of power electronics. And in the future I would like to work with the field of transportation.

✓ I would like to study at Yolopian University for a master's degree, and I would like to learn more about power electronics. In the future, I would like to work in the transportation field.

Use a master's degree because degree is a singular countable noun and master's is the standard possessive form. The name of a general academic field, power electronics, does not require the definite article.

× I'd like to study in Yolopian University to do my master degree and I'd like to study more about the field of power electronics. And in the future I would like to work with the field of transportation.

✓ I would like to study at Yolopian University for a master's degree, and I would like to learn more about power electronics. In the future, I would like to work in the transportation field.

Use study at when referring to attendance at a university. Use work in a field, not work with a field. For a master's degree expresses the purpose of studying more naturally than to do my master's degree.