Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 回答直接清晰，先说明身份，再补充学校和年级，结构很好。主要问题是“majoring diplomacy”搭配不自然，应改为“majoring in diplomacy”或“studying diplomacy”。此外，可以加入一个简短原因或学习内容，使答案更完整，但不必超过3句话。

Example: I’m a student. I’m currently in my senior year at Beijing Foreign Studies University, where I’m majoring in diplomacy. I’m particularly interested in international relations and cross-cultural communication.

Suggestion: 回答包含了学校、地点和选择北京的原因，内容较具体。不过，“quite near this place actually”应改为“which is actually quite close to here”；“when I was a girl”不够自然，可以说“when I was younger”。建议使用连接词“because”或“That’s because”清晰连接地点和原因，并避免句子过长。

Example: I study at Beijing Foreign Studies University, which is actually quite close to here. I chose to study in Beijing because I visited the city when I was younger and immediately fell in love with its lively atmosphere.

Suggestion: 回答的观点明确，也提到了历史、城市活力和就业机会等相关细节。但答案在“also I can get”处中断，导致意思不完整；“filled with diverse histories”搭配不自然，建议改为“rich in history”或“full of historical attractions”。应控制在2至4句话，并用“Moreover”或“Another reason is that”连接补充信息。

Example: Yes, definitely. Beijing is rich in history, but it is also a vibrant and cosmopolitan city. Moreover, it offers plenty of opportunities for internships and future employment, which is especially useful for a student majoring in diplomacy.

Suggestion: 回答采用了家乡与北京的对比，这是很好的展开方式，但答案在“On the other hand, Beijing is”处中断，缺少具体希望改变的内容，因此没有直接回答“想做什么改变”。“a place really relaxing”应改为“a really relaxing place”，“and and”是重复。建议明确提出一个改变，例如增加安静的公共空间、减少交通拥堵或改善校园休息设施。

Example: Yes, I would. I’m from Urumqi, Xinjiang, which is a relatively peaceful and relaxing place. Compared with my hometown, Beijing can feel much more stressful and crowded, so I’d like my university to provide more quiet green spaces where students can relax.

Suggestion: 回答清楚说明了未来计划和兴趣来源，内容有一定个人特色。“study abroad to Spain”应改为“study abroad in Spain”或“go to Spain to study”；“interested in Spanish”可能指对西班牙语感兴趣，如果指国家文化，应说“interested in Spain and its culture”；“choose Spanish major”应改为“major in Spanish”。建议补充计划学习的专业或目标，并使用“Although”连接遗憾与未来打算。

Example: I’m planning to study abroad in Spain, where I hope to study Spanish and international relations. I’ve been genuinely interested in the Spanish language and culture since I was a child. Although I couldn’t major in Spanish during my undergraduate studies, I’d like to pursue it in the future.

× I am a student. I'm currently studying at Beijing Foreign Studies University and I'm in my senior year of college majoring diplomacy.

✓ I am a student. I'm currently studying at Beijing Foreign Studies University, and I'm in my senior year of college, majoring in diplomacy.

“major”表示“主修某专业”时，通常使用“major in + 专业”。因此应将“majoring diplomacy”改为“majoring in diplomacy”。

× Yes it is because Beijing is a city filled with diverse histories and it's a vibrant and cosmopolitan city that's full of job opportunities and also I can get

✓ Yes, it is, because Beijing is a city with a diverse history. It is also a vibrant and cosmopolitan city full of job opportunities, and I can gain valuable experience here.

原句包含多个意思，但没有合理分成完整、清晰的句子，并且最后的“I can get”没有宾语，导致句子未完成。应拆分句子，并补充完整的动词结构。

× Yes, I would because I'm from Yurom Xinjiang and my hometown is a place really relaxing and and people have less stress about their lives.

✓ Yes, I would, because I'm from Xinjiang, and my hometown is a really relaxing place where people have less stress in their lives.

英语中，形容词通常放在名词前面，所以应将“a place really relaxing”改为“a really relaxing place”。“really”修饰“relaxing”，也应放在该形容词前面。

× Yes, I would because I'm from Yurom Xinjiang and my hometown is a place really relaxing and and people have less stress about their lives.

✓ Yes, I would, because I'm from Xinjiang, and my hometown is a really relaxing place where people have less stress in their lives.

“and and”是重复使用连词，属于连词错误。只保留一个“and”，并可使用“where”连接“my hometown”和后面的环境描述，使句子结构更自然。

× On the other hand, Beijing is

✓ On the other hand, Beijing is much more fast-paced and stressful.

“Beijing is”后面缺少补语，句意没有完成，因此是结构不完整的句子。使用形容词短语“much more fast-paced and stressful”补充完整意思。

× I'm planning to study abroad to Spain because since I was a little girl I was genuinely interested in Spanish.

✓ I'm planning to study abroad in Spain because I've been genuinely interested in Spanish since I was a little girl.

表示“在某个国家留学”时，应使用“study abroad in + 国家”，不能使用“to Spain”。“to”表示方向，而“in”表示地点。

× I'm planning to study abroad to Spain because since I was a little girl I was genuinely interested in Spanish.

✓ I'm planning to study abroad in Spain because I've been genuinely interested in Spanish since I was a little girl.

“since I was a little girl”表示从过去某个时间一直持续到现在的状态，因此主句更适合使用现在完成时“have been interested”，而不是一般过去时“was interested”。

× Unfortunately I didn't get the chance to choose Spanish major

✓ Unfortunately, I didn't get the chance to choose Spanish as my major.

表达“选择西班牙语作为我的专业”时，应使用固定结构“choose A as B”。因此应说“choose Spanish as my major”，而不是“choose Spanish major”。