Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be concise and clearer: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Correct grammar (e.g., 'I'm in my final year of high school') and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect ideas and mention a concrete plan or example.

Example: I'm in my final year of high school and I'm preparing for university entrance exams. For example, I attend morning classes at school and take two afternoons of coaching for maths and English, because I want to improve my scores and apply to top-ranked universities.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer about the place (name/type of school and city if possible), then add a brief, specific supporting detail about your studies. Avoid vague or off-topic remarks like 'wish me luck.'

Example: I study at Central High School in my hometown, where I take science-focused courses. At the moment I'm focusing on extra exam practice and attending a preparation class twice a week to improve my chances of acceptance.

Suggestion: Start with a clear opinion (yes or no) then explain with two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., 'However', 'Because'). Avoid vague phrases like 'bad people'—be specific about distractions or supportive elements.

Example: Yes, overall it is a good place to study because the teachers are supportive and the school offers focused exam preparation. However, there are some distractions from classmates who are not serious, so I rely on evening coaching classes and supportive friends to stay motivated.

Suggestion: Answer directly whether you'd like changes and specify realistic improvements rather than broad comparisons. Avoid judging other students; instead suggest concrete changes (better facilities, smaller classes, more support).

Example: Yes, I would like some changes, such as smaller class sizes and more one-to-one guidance from teachers. For example, having extra tutoring sessions and better study facilities would help students focus and improve results.

Suggestion: Give a clear, specific plan: state the field or country you want to study in and the steps you will take. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition. Mention one or two concrete goals or actions.

Example: I plan to study engineering at a top university abroad, ideally in the UK or Canada. To reach that goal I will focus on achieving high entrance exam scores, prepare a strong personal statement, and apply to three or four universities next year.

× I'm senior year for high school and I'm preparing for the university exam so my schedule is taking up courses in schools only focuses to my upcoming exams so I can do so I can pass exams successful and apply the top ranked universities.

✓ I'm a high school senior and I'm preparing for university entrance exams, so my schedule is filled with courses that focus only on my upcoming exams. I want to pass the exams and apply to top-ranked universities.

The original sentence has multiple structure problems: missing article ('a high school senior'), incorrect phrase order ('senior year for high school' -> 'a high school senior'), awkward verb phrases ('my schedule is taking up courses' -> 'my schedule is filled with courses'), incorrect preposition ('focuses to' -> 'focus on'), and ungrammatical adjective/adverb use ('pass exams successful' -> 'pass the exams'). Split into two sentences for clarity and fluency. Suggestion: use articles where required, correct verb patterns, and break long sentences into shorter clauses.

× I study in high school and I'm preparing for university so I hope I will get accepted and I believe I will access to the university that I want for a long time.

✓ I study at high school and I'm preparing for university, so I hope I will be accepted and I believe I will get into the university I want.

Use verb phrase 'be accepted' rather than 'get accepted' is acceptable but needs passive 'be accepted'; 'access to the university' is incorrect — use 'get into' or 'be admitted to'. Also use preposition 'at high school' (or 'in high school') and avoid redundant phrases like 'for a long time'. Suggestion: use the passive for admissions ('be accepted'/'be admitted to') and the correct verb for entering a university ('get into').

× Yes, wish me luck, nothing to say.

✓ Yes, wish me luck; I have nothing else to say.

The fragment 'nothing to say' is a sentence fragment lacking a subject and verb. Add 'I have' to make a complete sentence. Also use proper punctuation to connect the ideas. Suggestion: complete fragments by adding subject and verb.

× School develop because of the bad people that give me a negative energy so I can do nothing all day long.

✓ My school environment worsens because of some negative people who give me bad energy, so I feel unable to do anything all day.

Multiple errors: missing possessive/article ('My school' or 'The school'), incorrect verb form 'develop' (should be 'worsens' or 'has become stressful'), 'bad people that' -> 'people who', and awkward phrase 'give me a negative energy' -> 'give me bad energy' or 'drain my energy'. 'I can do nothing all day long' is natural as 'I feel unable to do anything all day.' Suggestion: use correct verb forms to match meaning, use 'who' for people, and use idiomatic expressions for 'negative energy.'

× But when I go to the course they are all optimistic about the future so I know that everything is gonna work for me at the end.

✓ But when I go to my classes, everyone is optimistic about the future, so I know that everything will work out for me in the end.

Use 'classes' or 'courses' with possessive 'my'; 'they are all' -> 'everyone is' is more natural; avoid informal 'gonna' in formal speech — use 'will' or 'will work out'. Replace 'at the end' with 'in the end'. Suggestion: choose standard future 'will' and idiomatic phrases 'work out' and 'in the end.'

× And thanks to my close friends, they really help.

✓ Thanks to my close friends; they really help me.

The pronoun 'they really help' requires an object ('help me'). Also 'And' at the start is unnecessary in formal responses. Suggestion: include the object pronoun when using 'help.'

× Uh, if I want to change my school to a private school, 'cause their students are more intelligent and also as a human, they are kind and they can be friends with everyone.

✓ If I could change schools, I would attend a private school because its students seem more academically focused and, in my experience, are kinder and more able to get along with everyone.

The original mixes tenses and uses informal 'cause.' Use conditional 'If I could change schools, I would...' Also 'their students' should refer to 'its students' (school = singular) and 'as a human, they are kind' is unclear — rephrase to 'in my experience, are kinder.' Suggestion: use correct conditional form for hypothetical change and match pronouns to singular/plural nouns.

× Uh, their perspective is really matter.

✓ Their perspective really matters.

Missing verb inflection: use 'matters' for third-person singular subject 'perspective.' Also 'really matter' is ungrammatical. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use correct verb forms.

× I want to study in top wing at universities and abroad and I consider that I'm gonna be I'm gonna pass my exam successful and then study the university that I want for a long time and it gives me opportunities.

✓ I want to study at a top university abroad. I believe I will pass my exams successfully and then attend the university I want, which will give me many opportunities.

The original sentence is long, repetitive, and uses informal 'gonna' twice. 'Top wing at universities' is incorrect — use 'top university.' 'Pass my exam successful' should be 'pass my exams successfully.' 'Study the university' -> 'attend the university.' Split into two sentences for clarity. Suggestion: use 'will' for future, adverb 'successfully', and clearer noun phrases like 'top university abroad.'