Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Reduce hesitations and repetition; open with a clear topic sentence, then add one precise supporting detail. Correct grammar for number agreement and phrasing (e.g., "I'm in my fourth year"). Aim for 2–3 sentences and avoid filler sounds like "uh."

Example: I'm a university student studying fashion design at City University. I'm in my fourth year and have been on the course for four years.

Suggestion: Give a direct answer first, then one clear location detail. Remove tangled phrasing and repeated information. Use linking words like "it's located" or "in" to be coherent.

Example: I study at City University in the city center of Beijing. The campus is centrally located, so it's easy to get to by public transport.

Suggestion: Make a clear, specific reason and avoid unclear phrases. Use correct grammar ("it has good access to transport"), and give one concrete example of what makes it good. Keep to 2–3 sentences and remove stammers.

Example: Yes, it's a good place to study because it has excellent public transport links and strong digital art courses. For example, the digital studio is well equipped, which helps me complete my projects.

Suggestion: This answer is generally clear and proposes specific changes. Improve fluency by removing repetition and filler, and phrase suggestions more naturally ("soundproofing panels," "quiet study zones"). Add a brief reason to strengthen the response.

Example: Yes. Because the campus is in the city center, study areas can be noisy, so I would like them to create quiet zones or install soundproofing panels so students can concentrate better.

Suggestion: Start with a direct topic sentence about your plans, then give one specific reason or short plan. Avoid repetition and use clearer vocabulary ("start my own fashion brand," "gain industry experience"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I plan to become a fashion designer and eventually start my own fashion brand. To prepare, I hope to gain industry experience through internships and build a portfolio to boost my confidence and sense of belonging in the field.

× I'm in my fourth years.

✓ I'm in my fourth year.

'Fourth year' refers to a single year level and should be singular. Use singular for countable noun when referring to one unit (year). Suggestion: use 'year' not 'years' when specifying which year you are in.

× I've been doing this course for, for four years, four years now.

✓ I've been doing this course for four years now.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable but has unnecessary repetition and pauses. Remove duplicate words and fillers to make it clear: 'I've been doing this course for four years now.' This uses present perfect continuous to express an action continuing up to present. Suggestion: avoid repeating phrases and fillers.

× Uh, while I'm a student at the City University and is in the, as in the city area of my, uh, city area in Beijing, I study fashion design here and I've been studying at that university for, uh, for four years.

✓ I'm a student at the City University, which is in the city area of Beijing. I study fashion design here and I've been studying at that university for four years.

Original has incorrect clause structure and a verb 'is' that doesn't match the subject. Use a relative pronoun 'which' to refer to the university and place the verb with the correct subject. Remove repetitions and fillers. Suggestion: restructure into two clear sentences and use 'which is' to provide location information.

× Yes, I think it's a good place to study because it have a good company to traffic and have has enough has enough, uh, digital art course 'cause so I can so I can sense of, uh, achievement from this, please.

✓ Yes, I think it's a good place to study because it has good transport links and enough digital art courses, so I can get a sense of achievement from this.

Multiple issues: 'it have' should be 'it has' (subject-verb agreement). Phrases 'good company to traffic' and 'have has enough' are incorrect word choices and repetitions. Use 'transport links' or 'public transport' instead of 'company to traffic.' 'Digital art course' should be plural 'courses' if referring to more than one. 'Sense of achievement' is the correct noun phrase and use 'get' rather than repeated 'so I can.' Suggestion: simplify and correct verb forms and vocabulary.

× The study area is often noisy because it's at the city center is in the city center.

✓ The study area is often noisy because it's in the city center.

Redundant and incorrect phrasing 'at the city center is in the city center.' Use 'in the city center' for location. Remove repetition. Suggestion: keep one clear prepositional phrase.

× So I wish that they could create quieter zones or add soundproofing profiling so students can, uh, can focus on their study.

✓ So I wish that they could create quieter zones or add soundproofing so students can focus on their studies.

'Soundproofing profiling' is unclear; 'soundproofing' is sufficient as an uncountable noun. Also use 'their studies' (plural) to refer to students' academic work. Remove duplicated 'can'. Suggestion: use 'focus on their studies' and avoid unnecessary words.

× Well, I would like to become a fashion developer and and I I can have all my own fashion brand because I think it can bring me a sense of belonging and boost my confidence in in this field.

✓ Well, I would like to become a fashion developer and have my own fashion brand because I think it will bring me a sense of belonging and boost my confidence in this field.

Remove duplicated words. Use 'have my own fashion brand' rather than 'can have all my own.' For the effect in future, use 'will bring' instead of 'can bring' when stating a likely outcome. Also correct 'in in' duplication and 'fashion brand' (no article 'all'). Suggestion: simplify structure, use 'will' for expected future effects, and eliminate repetitions.

× So I want to I want to achieve it.

✓ So I want to achieve that.

Avoid repetition 'I want to I want to.' Use a clear pronoun 'that' to refer to the previous goal. Suggestion: remove repeated phrase and use concise reference words.