Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Сократите повторы и заполнители (uh, um), дайте чёткое предложение о вашем статусе и уточните специальность и курс. Используйте простую грамматическую структуру: тема + дополнительная информация. Например, сначала скажите «I am a second/third-year student», затем укажите специальность и что изучаете.

Example: I am a third-year student studying to become a foreign language teacher. I specialise in teaching two languages and I am currently completing coursework and teaching practice.

Suggestion: Используйте правильное время и упрощённую структуру: начните с названия университета, затем назовите его местоположение. Избегайте незаконченных фраз и лишних слов.

Example: I study at Kazakh National Pedagogical University, which is located in the centre of Almaty.

Suggestion: Дайте короткий прямой ответ, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных доводов, избегая повторов и заполнителей. Сформулируйте время в минуты корректно и опишите, какие именно удобства имеются.

Example: Yes, it is a good place to study. It takes only ten minutes to walk from my dormitory to the campus, and there are many amenities nearby, such as cafes, a library and sports facilities.

Suggestion: Отвечайте прямо: скажите, что вы бы изменили, затем приведите конкретный пример и объясните, почему. Уберите повторы и местоимения «uh».

Example: I would modernise some of the older buildings on campus. For example, replacing outdated classrooms and improving heating and lighting would create a more comfortable learning environment.

Suggestion: Сформулируйте план чётко: укажите цель (магистратура за границей), шаги, которые вы предпринимаете, и навыки, которые развиваете. Избегайте непонятных фраз и перечислений без связок.

Example: I plan to pursue a master's degree abroad. At the moment I am preparing application documents, improving my listening and writing skills, and gaining relevant experience to meet university requirements.

× I'm currently a student, uh, I'm a second third year of my uh, study the uh, the teacher of uh, two foreign language, uh, my uh.

✓ I'm currently a student; I'm in my third year studying to become a teacher of two foreign languages.

The original sentence has multiple structure problems: incorrect word order, missing prepositions, and unclear phrasing. This is a sentence structure error because ideas are fragmented and connectors are missing. Suggestion: combine ideas into one clear clause, use 'in my third year' for year of study, use 'studying to become a teacher' to express intended career, and pluralize 'languages'.

× I studied Kazakh National Pedagogy, a university named for. It's located the center of the Almaty so.

✓ I study at Kazakh National Pedagogical University, which is located in the center of Almaty.

The student used past tense 'studied' when referring to current study and incorrect word order 'named for' and missing preposition 'in'. This is a tense and sentence structure issue; use present simple 'study' for current enrollment, use the proper university name form 'Kazakh National Pedagogical University', use 'which is' for relative clause, and 'in the center of Almaty' for location.

× Yes, definitely it take uh, time, only, umm, 10s uh, minute to reach this uh, university, uh, building uh, from my, uh, dormitory, umm, and also, uh, there are also, uh, a lot of amenities after, uh, living the.

✓ Yes, definitely it takes only about ten minutes to reach the university building from my dormitory, and there are also a lot of amenities nearby.

Errors include subject-verb agreement ('it take' should be 'it takes'), incorrect quantifier/number format ('10s minute' should be 'about ten minutes'), and awkward phrasing 'after living the'. These are present-tense and quantifier/word choice issues. Suggestion: use 'it takes' for current facts, write numbers as words for small numbers, use 'nearby' for location of amenities.

× Only a few things I would, uh, change if I have an opportunity, uh, for instance, uh, we have uh, some old buildings, old structured buildings. I would, I would change it more fashionable, more, uh, modern, umm, buildings that.

✓ There are only a few things I would change if I had the opportunity. For instance, we have some old buildings; I would like to replace them with more modern, fashionable buildings.

This contains conditional tense misuse ('if I have' should be 'if I had') and fragmented sentences. It's a sentence structure and tense issue. Use the second conditional for unreal or hypothetical changes: 'if I had the opportunity'. Also use clear verbs 'replace them' and proper adjective order 'more modern, fashionable buildings'.

× I want to study my master's degree in abroad, so currently I'm put concrete substitute artist, ambitious and also I prepare some documents that really need for this universities and develop my skills listening, writing and etcetera. I think it helps me.

✓ I want to study for my master's degree abroad, so currently I'm preparing documents required by these universities and developing my listening and writing skills. I am ambitious and hope this will help me.

Multiple errors: incorrect preposition 'in abroad' should be 'abroad', wrong verb phrases 'I'm put concrete substitute artist' unclear and incorrect, tense consistency and article/plural errors 'this universities'. This is mainly future/intent expression and sentence structure errors. Use 'want to study for my master's degree abroad', present continuous 'I'm preparing' for current actions toward a future goal, 'required by these universities' for documents, and list skills as 'listening and writing skills'. Also separate the personal quality 'I am ambitious' into a clear sentence.