Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more natural and complete: include an article before the job place and add a brief supporting detail about your role. Keep it concise and avoid pauses. Use linking words if adding details.

Example: I work as a senior lawyer at a Russian law firm. I mainly handle corporate contracts and supervise junior associates, so I spend most of my day reviewing legal documents and advising clients.

Suggestion: Use correct tense and grammar, avoid redundancy and fillers, and be specific. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a concise supporting detail about your degrees and specialization. Limit to 2–3 sentences.

Example: I studied at Moscow State University, which is one of the most reputable universities in my country. I completed a bachelor's degree and then a master's degree in law, specializing in civil law.

Suggestion: Be concise and remove repetitions and filler words. Provide specific reasons and link them logically (e.g., reputation, experienced faculty). Use plural agreement and avoid vague phrases like 'very impressed.'

Example: Yes, I believe it is. It has an excellent national reputation and a long history, and the professors are well known in their fields, so students benefit from strong academic expertise and research opportunities.

Suggestion: State the change directly and give a specific example of the problem and a possible improvement. Use linking words (for example, because, so) and avoid excessive hesitation.

Example: I would like the university to be less bureaucratic, especially in administrative processes. For example, clearer online procedures for submitting documents and faster communication from admissions would greatly reduce delays for students.

Suggestion: Be specific about the program and express your motivation concisely. Correct phrasing (e.g., 'attend Harvard' or 'study at an Ivy League university') and name the exact subject clearly. Limit to two sentences and avoid fillers.

Example: I plan to study at an Ivy League university such as Harvard to focus on algorithmic pricing and AI tools. I want to learn advanced techniques that I can apply to legal technology and pricing strategies in my practice.

× I work as a senior lawyer at Russian law firm.

✓ I work as a senior lawyer at a Russian law firm.

The noun phrase 'Russian law firm' needs the indefinite article 'a' before it because it refers to one non-specific firm. Add 'a' and include the adjective order 'a Russian law firm' to be grammatically correct.

× I'm studied in Moscow State University, quite reputable, uh, university in my country, and I graduated here twicely.

✓ I studied at Moscow State University, a quite reputable university in my country, and I graduated here twice.

Use simple past 'studied' for completed actions rather than 'I'm studied' (which is incorrect). Use preposition 'at' with institutions. Use the article 'a' before 'quite reputable university'. Correct adverb 'twice' instead of 'twicely'.

× First one I get, I got my bachelor degree and then I got my umm, umm, master's degree in a field of law and civil law particularly.

✓ First, I got my bachelor's degree, and then I got my master's degree in the field of law, particularly civil law.

Use past simple 'got' for completed actions. 'Bachelor's degree' and 'master's degree' require possessive form with apostrophe-s. Use the definite article 'the' with 'field of law'. Reorder 'particularly civil law' for clarity.

× And the professors, he's quite, umm, quite well known, uh, in their field and uh, the students very impressed.

✓ And the professors are quite well known in their fields, and the students are very impressed.

Pronoun and verb agreement: 'professors' is plural so use 'are' not 'he's'. Match plural noun with plural possessive 'their fields'. Also add the verb 'are' for 'the students' to form a complete clause.

× I think so in Russia it's at least because it's very, it's very high rated university in Russia, probably the most high rated and uh, it's very, it's oldest, uh, Russian university as well.

✓ I think so. In Russia, at least, it's a very highly rated university, probably the highest-rated and also the oldest Russian university.

Add 'a' before 'very highly rated university'. Use adverb 'highly rated' instead of adjective 'high rated'. Use superlative 'highest-rated' for 'most high rated'. 'The oldest' requires 'the'. Punctuation and phrasing adjusted for clarity.

× Umm, uh, I wish it would be less bureaucratic and more student friendly.

✓ I wish it were less bureaucratic and more student-friendly.

Use subjunctive 'were' after 'I wish' for hypothetical situations. 'Student-friendly' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective. No preposition change needed but verb form corrected.

× I mean, umm, you know, sometimes you have a very, uh, a very big problem with your documents, with, uh, the communication with the, umm, university admissions.

✓ I mean, sometimes you have big problems with your documents and with communication with the university admissions office.

Pluralize 'problem' to 'problems' for general situations. Omit redundant 'a very, uh, a very'. Use 'communication with the university admissions office' for natural phrasing and complete noun phrase.

× I would like to, umm, I would like to go to get uh, in Harvard or other Ivy League university and study precisely what I would like to study itself, algorithmical pricing and AI technology tools and uh, yeah.

✓ I would like to go to Harvard or another Ivy League university and study exactly what I want to study: algorithmic pricing and AI technology tools.

Use 'go to Harvard' not 'go to get in Harvard'. Use 'another Ivy League university' for singular alternative. Replace awkward 'study precisely what I would like to study itself' with 'study exactly what I want to study'. Use adjective 'algorithmic' instead of 'algorithmical'. Punctuation adjusted for clarity.