Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be clearer and more concise. Start with a direct topic sentence stating your status, then give one or two specific supporting details (course name, career goal). Avoid repetition and unclear phrases. Use linking words if you add reasons.

Example: I am currently a student, studying humanities and social sciences. I hope to specialize in political science and eventually train as a lawyer, because I want to work in public policy and help improve legal access.

Suggestion: Give a clear topic sentence then elaborate with a specific detail or example. Use linking words (for example, however) to connect ideas and correct minor grammar (e.g., 'worry about').

Example: I study at a public university because it is more affordable. For example, I save money on tuition, but I do need to budget carefully for food and transportation.

Suggestion: Answer directly, then support with a specific reason or short example. Avoid trailing off or unfinished sentences. Use linking words like 'however' to show contrast.

Example: Yes, it is a good place to study because the students are welcoming and create a supportive atmosphere. However, making close friends can be difficult at first because many students commute and have busy schedules.

Suggestion: Be specific and complete your thought. State the change you want, explain why, and give one suggestion for improvement. Avoid leaving the sentence unfinished.

Example: Yes, I would like the school to improve the restrooms because they are often dirty and poorly maintained. For instance, regular cleaning and better ventilation would make them much more hygienic and comfortable for students.

Suggestion: Provide at least a brief plan or possibility instead of a single word. If uncertain, say you are undecided and mention two realistic options and reasons. This shows thought and expands the answer appropriately.

Example: I am not yet sure, but I am considering either continuing to a master's in political science or taking professional law courses. I would choose a master's if I want to focus on research, or law training if I decide to become a lawyer.

× I am taking a course of humanities and social sciences as I wanted to become a political science.

✓ I am taking a course in humanities and social sciences because I want to become a political scientist.

The original mixes present continuous with past 'wanted' causing tense inconsistency and uses wrong noun 'political science' for a person. Use present 'want' to match 'I am taking' and change 'course of' to 'course in' and 'political science' to 'political scientist'.

× I mean a part of political science and a lawyer, but my main goal is to be better.

✓ I mean part of political science and to become a lawyer, but my main goal is to improve.

The phrase 'a part of' is unnatural; use 'part of' or rephrase. 'a lawyer' needs an infinitive to show intention: 'to become a lawyer'. 'be better' is vague; use 'improve' or 'get better' to clarify. Articles were incorrectly applied and the sentence structure was unclear.

× I am studying in a public school because it's more affordable.

✓ I am studying at a public school because it's more affordable.

Use 'at' with institutions like 'school' when referring to attendance. 'In a public school' can be used in some contexts but 'at a public school' is more idiomatic for where you study.

× The only thing that I have to worry is my food and transportation and the area is school friendly too.

✓ The only things I have to worry about are food and transportation, and the area is school-friendly too.

Missing preposition 'about' after 'worry' and subject-verb agreement: 'things... are'. Also 'school friendly' should be hyphenated as a compound adjective 'school-friendly'. The sentence was run-on and needs commas to separate ideas.

× Yes, the school is friendly. I mean, not the school itself, but the students are friendly and a great environment.

✓ Yes, the school is friendly. I mean not the school building itself, but the students are friendly and the environment is great.

The phrase 'and a great environment' lacked a verb and connection; rephrase to 'the environment is great'. Clarify 'not the school itself' by adding 'building' for meaning. This fixes sentence fragment and improves clarity.

× But sometimes it requires a lot of effort to have friends because.

✓ But sometimes it requires a lot of effort to make friends.

Original ends with 'because' leaving the sentence incomplete; also 'have friends' is acceptable but 'make friends' is more natural for forming friendships. Remove dangling 'because' to complete the sentence.

× Yes, especially in a particular area which is our restroom or bathroom.

✓ Yes, especially in one particular area: our restroom or bathroom.

Use 'one particular area' rather than 'a particular area which is'. Also use a colon or rephrase for clarity. Article use was awkward; this correction improves natural phrasing.

× Our restroom here and the place where I study is not very good.

✓ The restroom here and the place where I study are not very good.

Subject-verb agreement: compound subject 'The restroom... and the place' is plural, so use plural verb 'are' not 'is'. This is a present tense agreement error.

× It is very dirty and nasty, which I.

✓ It is very dirty and nasty, which bothers me.

Original ends abruptly with 'which I.' creating a fragment. Add a verb phrase 'bothers me' to complete the relative clause and clarify the speaker's feeling.

× I don't know.

✓ I don't know what I'll do yet.

While 'I don't know' is grammatically correct, it is short and may not fully answer 'What are your future study plans?'. Providing a fuller response with future tense 'I'll' fits the question context better. If keeping short, no correction necessary; suggested expansion improves relevance.