Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be grammatically correct, concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct article use and tense: e.g. “I’m a student. I’ve just finished my DSE/DSC exams.” Avoid fillers like “uh” and unnecessary repetition.

Example: I’m a student. I’ve just finished my DSC exams and I’m planning my next steps.

Suggestion: Answer directly and add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Use correct noun phrases and avoid vague words like “very special.” For example, mention the school name or a characteristic and link with “because” or “and.”

Example: I study at a secondary school in Hong Kong, and it’s known for its strong academic programs because many students focus on exam preparation.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons in 1–2 sentences. Use correct grammar, avoid repetition, and clarify the point about exams. Use linking words like “because” or “so.”

Example: I don’t think it’s ideal because the school focuses too much on exam preparation, which limits opportunities for creative learning and extracurricular activities.

Suggestion: Directly state the change you would like and give specific reasons. Use correct grammar for comparative statements (e.g. “I would prefer”) and avoid fillers. Mention one or two concrete changes and link reasons with “so” or “because.”

Example: I would prefer a system like in the US because students there often have shorter school hours and more time for hobbies, so they can balance study with activities such as playing piano or basketball.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence about your plans, then give specific details and reasons. Use correct collocations (e.g. “receive offers from universities”) and avoid repetition. Link reason with “because” or “so.”

Example: My plan is to receive offers from universities, because in Hong Kong a university degree is highly valued and can lead to better job opportunities.

× I'm student, I'm finished my DSC exam. Uh.

✓ I'm a student; I've finished my DSC exam.

Missing indefinite article 'a' before singular count noun 'student' (Article errors, ID 22). Also use present perfect 'I've finished' to indicate a completed action with relevance to the present. Suggestion: add 'a' before 'student' and use 'I have finished' or 'I've finished'.

× I am studying in Hong Kong secondary school. This is very special place and umm.

✓ I am studying at a secondary school in Hong Kong. This is a very special place.

Use preposition 'at' with 'school' for attendance and include the article 'a' before 'secondary school' (Incorrect use of prepositions ID 11 and Article errors ID 22). Also 'a very special place' needs the article 'a'. Suggestion: say 'at a secondary school in Hong Kong' and include 'a' before 'very special place'.

× I don't think so because we we too focus in exam. We don't because the DSC exam is like your like your future test is not exactly.

✓ I don't think so because we focus too much on exams. We don't, because the DSC exam is not exactly a test of your future.

Duplicate 'we' is an error and verb phrase should be 'focus too much on' with preposition 'on' (Subject-verb agreement/Preposition ID 27 and 11). Also add article 'a' before 'test' and reorder clause for clarity (Sentence structure errors ID 26 and Article errors ID 22). Suggestion: use 'focus too much on exams' and 'is not exactly a test of your future'.

× I think I will choose US because they are not have very long studying time and the student can focusing uh which is their favorite fav uh which is their their hobbies like playing piano like playing basketball or or.

✓ I think I would choose the US because they don't have very long study hours, and students can focus on their favorite hobbies, like playing piano or basketball.

Use conditional 'would' for hypothetical preference (Modal verb usage ID 4). 'They are not have' is ungrammatical; use 'don't have' (Verb form issue). 'Studying time' should be 'study hours' and 'can focus on' requires preposition 'on' (Preposition ID 11). Remove duplicate words and use plural 'students' for general reference (Singular and plural issue ID 1). Suggestion: 'I think I would choose the US because they don't have very long study hours, and students can focus on their hobbies.'

× To get our offers, uh, in university, because in Hong Kong you get university praise is very important. That mean you can have, uh, many job, many job offers.

✓ To get offers from universities, because in Hong Kong getting a university place is very important. That means you can get many job offers.

'Our offers' is unclear; use 'offers from universities' and plural 'offers' (Singular and plural ID 1). 'University praise' is incorrect; likely 'university place' (Article errors ID 22). 'That mean' should be 'That means' for subject-verb agreement (Subject-verb agreement ID 27). Use 'get many job offers' instead of repeating 'many job'. Suggestion: say 'to get offers from universities' and 'getting a university place is very important'.