Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Be more concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct verb forms and word order (e.g., “I chose,” “I am studying at…”). Avoid repetition.

Example: I am a Business Management student at Guru Nanak Dev University. I chose this major because I’m interested in how businesses are started and run, and I’d like to create my own company in the future, so this course teaches the skills I need.

Suggestion: Give a direct location sentence then add one or two specific details with linking words. Use plural/singular correctly and avoid long run-on sentences. Mention concrete activities or clubs by name if possible.

Example: I study Business Management at Guru Nanak Dev University. For example, I attend business clubs and workshops where I learn practical skills such as marketing and finance, which will help me start my own company.

Suggestion: Answer directly and then support with one specific reason using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Correct pronouns and phrasing (use “its” not “their”). Avoid filler words like “uh.”

Example: Yes, it is a great place to study because the campus environment is peaceful and its teachers are very supportive. For example, professors offer extra guidance during office hours whenever I struggle with assignments.

Suggestion: Provide a clear direct response (Yes/No) then justify briefly. If you say no changes are needed, explain one specific feature you appreciate. Fix grammar: “there is nothing to change,” “everything is in good order.”

Example: No, I wouldn’t change much because the university already has good facilities. For example, the libraries are well-stocked and study areas are quiet, which helps students focus on their work.

Suggestion: State your plan clearly, then give specific reasons with linking words (e.g., “because,” “so that”). Correct grammar: “I am keen to study abroad,” “to gain more knowledge,” “compared to my country.” Mention where or what you want to study if possible.

Example: I am keen to study abroad to gain broader knowledge and experience from advanced institutions. For example, I hope to attend a university with strong business programs so I can learn modern management practices and benefit from international faculty.

× I am a student at you could write the university in Business Management.

✓ I am a student at Guru Nanak Dev University studying Business Management.

The original sentence mixes fragments and has incorrect phrasing ('you could write the university'). This is a sentence structure error: the subject, verb and object/phrase must be put in correct order. Use 'at [university]' then use 'studying' or 'in' to indicate the major. Keep one clear clause: 'a student at [university] studying [major]'. Remember to avoid inserting unrelated phrases.

× I have choose this major because I have keen interest in this how to create business as well as how to make own business because I want to make my own business someday.

✓ I chose this major because I have a keen interest in how to create and run a business, and I want to start my own business someday.

The error uses the base form 'choose' after 'have' instead of the past participle 'chosen' or should use simple past 'chose'. The phrase 'have keen interest' misses the article 'a'. Also 'how to make own business' is unidiomatic; use 'start' or 'run' and include 'a'. Use either present perfect 'I have chosen' or simple past 'I chose'. Here simple past 'I chose' is natural and consistent.

× Well, I am a student of Guru Nanak Dev University in Business management where I learn number of things about business, how to operate it as well as I also join number of business clubs to gather more knowledge about this because I want to open my own company one day.

✓ I am a student at Guru Nanak Dev University in Business Management, where I learn a number of things about business and how to operate one. I have also joined several business clubs to gain more knowledge because I want to open my own company one day.

Use 'at' rather than 'of' for being enrolled at a university. 'Learn number of things' needs the article 'a' and 'a number of' or 'several'. 'Operate it' is vague; 'operate one' or 'operate a business' is clearer. 'I also join' should be past or present perfect to indicate completed or ongoing action: 'I have also joined'. Use 'gain' or 'get' knowledge, not 'gather' here. Prepositions and article choice were incorrect.

× Yes, of course it is a good place for study because of their environment as well as their teachers are very kind and very supportive and always willing to help in help me in whenever I have any issue in my study.

✓ Yes, of course it is a good place to study because the environment and the teachers are very kind and supportive and always willing to help me whenever I have any problems with my studies.

The sentence incorrectly uses the plural possessive pronoun 'their' to refer to a singular place ('it'). Use 'the environment' and 'the teachers' or 'its environment' for the place. Also 'help in help me in' is redundant and ungrammatical. Use 'help me' and 'whenever I have any problems with my studies'. Pronoun agreement and redundancy were the issues.

× So I love that place to, uh, making my future.

✓ So I love that place because it helps me build my future.

The original is fragmented and uses an incorrect form 'to, uh, making'. This is a sentence structure error. Use a clear connective 'because' and the correct verb form 'helps me build' or 'for making' (but 'helps me build' is more natural).

× Yes, I like that place. I think there are nothing to change because every everything is in their good manner, for example, and there are good facilities of books and libraries as well as they provide all things which are essential for students to study.

✓ Yes, I like that place. I think there is nothing to change because everything is in good order. For example, there are good library facilities and they provide all the things that are essential for students to study.

Errors include 'there are nothing' (use 'there is nothing') and 'every everything' (redundant). 'Their good manner' is incorrect; use 'in good order' or 'well organized'. 'Facilities of books and libraries' should be 'library facilities' or 'good libraries and books'. Quantifier and determiners were misused.

× To be honest I keen interest in to study abroad as I have a willing to be prepared or gathered more knowledge because in abroad there are very good facilities and advanced facilities comparing to my nation.

✓ To be honest, I have a keen interest in studying abroad because I want to gain more knowledge. Abroad there are very good and advanced facilities compared to my country.

Missing auxiliary verb: 'I keen interest' should be 'I have a keen interest' (present tense). 'in to study' should be 'in studying' (verb + -ing). 'I have a willing' is incorrect; use 'I am willing' or 'I want'. 'be prepared or gathered' mixes forms; use 'to gain' or 'to acquire'. 'in abroad' should be 'abroad' without 'in'. Also use 'compared to my country' rather than 'comparing to my nation'. Tense and verb form errors present.

× So I want to study in abroad university and gather the experience of the teachers and the professors where.

✓ So I want to study at a university abroad and learn from the experience of the teachers and professors there.

Incorrect preposition 'in abroad university' should be 'at a university abroad'. 'Gather the experience of' is unidiomatic; use 'learn from the experience of' or 'gain experience from'. Ending with 'where' is incorrect; use 'there'. This is a sentence structure and preposition error.