Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Улучшите ясность и грамматику. В ответе много ошибок лексики и структуры (“visiting the 8th grass”, “antique gymnasium”, “city water”) — используйте простые и правильные выражения: назовите класс и школу понятно, избегайте лишних деталей, которые мешают пониманию. Сформулируйте одно-топиковое предложение, затем добавьте короткую конкретную поддержку (например, когда вы начали учиться).

Example: I'm a student. I'm in the eighth grade at a Gymnasium in Wörth, Germany. I started at this school when I was 12, and I have many friends there.

Suggestion: Сократите и уточните информацию, исправьте имена собственные и произношение (в письменной форме — названия). Используйте ясное предложение: название школы и город. Если нужно, добавьте краткую характеристику школы одним предложением.

Example: I study at Nancy Gymnasium in Wetzlar, Germany. It's a large school with good facilities.

Suggestion: Хорошая структура, но можно улучшить связки и точность лексики. Объединяйте короткие предложения с помощью союзов и избегайте повторов (“really, really”). Добавьте конкретный пример, почему школа хороша (например, лаборатории, библиотека).

Example: Yes, I think it's a great place to study because it has modern labs and a large library. The teachers are very friendly, and the school is conveniently located in the city centre.

Suggestion: Ответ содержательный и уместный, но стоит убрать заполнители («uh») и сделать формулировки более точными. Используйте связку причины и примера: сначала предложение с желаемым изменением, затем объясните, почему и приведите конкретные примеры предметов.

Example: I would like the school to offer more creative subjects, such as acting and cooking, because they would make the timetable more varied and help students develop practical skills.

Suggestion: Исправьте грамматику и произношение формальнее: используйте ‘want to’ и согласование числительных/существительных (‘good grades’). Сформулируйте план в логической последовательности и добавьте краткое объяснение мотивации (почему медицина).

Example: In 12th grade I want to get very good grades in my exams. After that I plan to study medicine at a university in Berlin because I want to become a doctor and work in a hospital.

× I'm a student right now I'm visiting the 8th grass of the antique gymnasium in the city water in Germany.

✓ I'm a student. Right now I'm in the 8th grade at an old gymnasium in the city of Wetzlar in Germany.

The original sentence has run-on structure and incorrect word choices ('grass', 'antique', 'water') and missing punctuation. Split into two sentences, use 'grade' for school year, 'old' for 'antique' (or 'historic'), and a likely city name 'Wetzlar' instead of 'water'. Ensure prepositions 'in the city of' are used correctly.

× I have so much friends here and I started with the school at the age of 12 years in the 7th class.

✓ I have so many friends here, and I started school at the age of 12 in the 7th grade.

Use 'many' with countable nouns ('friends'), not 'much'. Omit unnecessary words: 'with the school' -> 'started school'. 'Years' unnecessary after age; use 'grade' instead of 'class' for consistency. Add comma for compound sentence.

× I study in a high school named Nancy Gymnasium in the city Weather in Germany.

✓ I study at a high school called Nancy Gymnasium in the city of Wetter in Germany.

Use 'study at' for institutions. 'Named' can be 'called'. Use 'city of' before place name and correct probable city name 'Wetter' instead of 'Weather'. Preposition 'in' was correct for country but 'in the city of' is more natural.

× My school is one of the best in our cities.

✓ My school is one of the best in our city.

'One of the best in our cities' implies multiple cities; likely intended singular 'city'. Ensure subject-verb and noun agreement with context.

× It's modern, big. Our teachers are really, really friendly and kind to their students and the places in the middle of the city, so it's really cool here.

✓ It's modern and big. Our teachers are really, really friendly and kind to their students, and the school is in the middle of the city, so it's really cool here.

Combine adjectives with 'and' rather than a comma fragment. 'Places' is vague; specify 'the school' and use 'in the middle of the city'. Add commas to join clauses correctly.

× it would be a nice idea to involve some more interesting subjects, not only like math and English, maybe more creative ones, uh for instance like acting or cooking, because it will make our school day more colorful and nice.

✓ It would be a good idea to include some more interesting subjects, not only math and English, but also creative ones, for example acting or cooking, because they would make our school day more varied and enjoyable.

Use 'include' instead of 'involve' for subjects. Avoid filler words. Replace 'like' misuse; use 'for example' or 'such as'. Match modals and tense: 'would make' is conditional, consistent with 'would be' earlier. Use plural 'they' to refer to subjects and choose clearer adjectives ('varied', 'enjoyable').

× At the 12th grade, I wanna write my exams with a really good grades and then I will probably study medicine at a medicine university at Berlin so I can become a doctor in the future and work in a hospital.

✓ In 12th grade, I want to take my exams and get really good grades, and then I will probably study medicine at a medical university in Berlin so I can become a doctor and work in a hospital in the future.

Use 'In 12th grade' rather than 'At the 12th grade'. Avoid informal 'wanna' -> 'want to'. Use 'take exams' and 'get good grades' (plural). 'Medical university' not 'medicine university'. Use preposition 'in Berlin'. Keep future tense consistent and concise.