Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the response clearer and more concise: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid fillers and repetitions, correct tense and word choice, and give one or two specific details about what you are preparing for. Use linking words to connect ideas.

Example: I'm a student. I recently finished 10th grade and I'm currently preparing for my university entrance exams. At the moment I am finishing the school year while studying specific subjects such as maths and English to get ready for those tests.

Suggestion: Answer directly, name the place clearly, avoid hesitations and unnecessary time references unless relevant. If mentioning online courses, give a clear schedule or reason. Use linking words to connect the two study locations.

Example: I study at Kinto High School, and I also take online English courses offered by Astana Online. In addition, I usually study English in the evenings because that is when I have free time.

Suggestion: Give a direct opinion and support it with specific reasons. Avoid vague phrases and incorrect expressions. Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' and be precise about what makes it good (teachers, resources, environment, schedule).

Example: Yes, it's a good place to study because the teachers are helpful and there are many resources such as computers and a large library. For example, I can access online journals and get extra help from teachers during morning study sessions.

Suggestion: State one or two specific changes clearly. Avoid repetition and unclear phrasing. Explain why the change is needed and how it would help other students, using linking words such as 'because' or 'so that'.

Example: Yes, I would like the library to have more up-to-date textbooks and reference books because the current selection is limited. This would help future students by giving them better resources for research and exam preparation.

Suggestion: Begin with a clear topic sentence about your plan, correct grammar (infinitive vs gerund), and give a brief sequence of steps you will take. Use linking words like 'first', 'then', 'after that' and be specific about qualifications or experience you will pursue.

Example: My future plan is to become an English teacher. First, I will improve my English and take the IELTS exam to get a good score; then I plan to study education or attend teacher-training courses so I can teach speaking and communication skills in secondary schools.

× I'm a student, I've recently finished my 10th grade at school, also UH.

✓ I'm a student. I recently finished 10th grade at school and am preparing for the university entrance exams.

The original combines clauses incorrectly and uses 'UH' unclearly. This is a sentence structure error: run-on and unclear reference. Split into two sentences, remove filler 'UH', and clarify 'university entrance exams' to match context.

× So currently I prepare for my UH, finishing year at at my school and focusing on my future exams.

✓ So currently I am preparing for university entrance exams, finishing my final year at school and focusing on my future exams.

The student used simple present 'I prepare' where present continuous 'I am preparing' is appropriate for an ongoing action. Also 'finishing year at at my school' has duplication and article issues; corrected to 'finishing my final year at school'.

× I study at the school in the Kinto uh, also I have some courses in the Astana online courses.

✓ I study at a school in Kinto and I also take some online courses from Astana.

The original uses awkward prepositions and articles: 'at the school in the Kinto' and 'in the Astana online courses'. Use 'at a school in Kinto' and 'take online courses from Astana' for natural preposition use.

× Uh, I've uh, been uh, studying uh, in this uh, courses English language about uh, 1:00 AM.

✓ I have been studying English in these courses since about 1:00 AM.

'this courses' is incorrect article number agreement; use 'these courses'. Also 'studying in these courses English language' has wrong word order. Use 'studying English in these courses' and 'since about 1:00 AM' for time reference.

× Uh, there are too many opportunities to know, uh, to know new information about any types of subjects.

✓ There are many opportunities to learn new information about different types of subjects.

'Too many' suggests excess; likely intended 'many'. 'To know, to know new information' is repetitive. Use 'learn' and 'different types of subjects' for correct quantifier and phrasing.

× And also I have a world to study in the morning because it helps me to learn by hard new things quickly and correctly.

✓ I also have time to study in the morning because it helps me learn new things more quickly and effectively.

'a world to study' is incorrect—wrong word choice/pronoun usage. 'learn by hard' is incorrect; change to 'learn...more quickly and effectively'. This fixes pronoun/word choice and adverb usage.

× Yes, there are a few uh, books in the library.

✓ Yes, there are only a few books in the library.

The sentence is grammatically acceptable but context suggests limited quantity; adding 'only' makes meaning clear. This addresses article/quantifier nuance.

× Uh, I would like to, uh, give uh some kind of new and, uh, educational books, uh, for my school in the library, uh, to be an useful for uh future students to know uh, and to be more, more.

✓ I would like the school library to have new educational books that will be useful for future students to learn more.

The original is a run-on with many fillers and unclear structure. Rephrase to a clear, concise sentence: 'I would like the school library to have new educational books...' which corrects sentence structure errors and removes fillers.

× My future study plans is to be teaching English language.

✓ My future study plan is to teach the English language.

Subject 'plans' vs 'is' mismatch: use singular 'plan is' or plural 'plans are'. Also 'to be teaching' is awkward here; infinitive 'to teach' is appropriate. Added 'the' before 'English language'.

× Uh, I tried out to learn more and educate English language and given IELTS.

✓ I am trying to learn more about English and to prepare for the IELTS exam.

'Tried out to learn' is incorrect verb pattern; use 'trying to learn' for ongoing effort. 'Educate English language' is wrong; use 'learn about English' or 'improve my English'. 'Given IELTS' should be 'prepare for the IELTS exam'.

× After that I uh dreamed to be an English uh teacher in some kind of schools to teach other people's speaking English.

✓ After that, I hope to become an English teacher in a school where I can teach other people to speak English.

'Dreamed to be' is incorrect collocation; use 'hope to become' or 'dream of becoming'. 'Some kind of schools' is vague; use 'a school'. 'Teach other people's speaking English' is ungrammatical; rephrase to 'teach other people to speak English'. This fixes sentence structure and collocation.