Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Câu trả lời của bạn rõ ràng và trực tiếp, nhưng có thể tự nhiên và mạch lạc hơn bằng cách nối 2 câu ngắn thành một, dùng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh lặp. Thêm một hoặc hai từ bổ sung (ví dụ: chuyên ngành) sẽ làm câu giàu thông tin hơn.

Example: I'm a freshman studying at the University of Foreign Languages, majoring in English.

Suggestion: Bạn trả lời chính nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và câu hỏi ngược (At which city?) không phù hợp trong câu trả lời. Nên nêu rõ thành phố và sắp xếp câu đúng trật tự, tránh hỏi lại giám khảo.

Example: I study English at the University of Foreign Languages in Hanoi.

Suggestion: Nội dung phù hợp nhưng cấu trúc bị lặp, ngữ pháp và danh sách lý do cần được nối mạch logic bằng liên từ. Sử dụng danh từ số nhiều/động từ đúng dạng (teachers) và thể hiện rõ từng lợi ích cụ thể hơn.

Example: Yes, it's a great place to study because the courses give me lots of practice, I can make new friends easily, and the teachers are very supportive.

Suggestion: Ý tưởng rõ nhưng câu lộn xộn và thừa từ, phát âm ‘MMM’ không cần. Hãy nói rõ muốn thay đổi gì cụ thể (ví dụ: môi trường hỗ trợ, cơ sở vật chất, hoạt động ngoại khóa) và nêu lý do rõ ràng, dùng cấu trúc ngắn gọn, mạch lạc.

Example: Yes. I'd like the environment to be more supportive, with more extracurricular activities and practical workshops, because that would help me build confidence and improve my skills.

Suggestion: Mục tiêu rõ nhưng ngắt quãng, có lỗi ngữ pháp (a master degree → a master's degree), câu cuối bị dở dang và thông tin lộn xộn. Nên nói rõ chương trình, lý do, kế hoạch cụ thể và liệt kê các hành động một cách mạch lạc.

Example: I plan to pursue a master's degree in business next year to improve my management skills and increase my job prospects. For example, I will apply to two universities, including the University of Hanoi, and prepare for the entrance exams and language tests.

× I study English language at the University of Foreign Languages. At which city?

✓ I study English at the University of Foreign Languages. In which city is it located?

The phrase 'At which city?' is incorrect with 'at'; use the preposition 'in' for cities and form a full question with a verb. Also 'English language' is more natural as 'English'. (Preposition and sentence structure correction.)

× Yes, I think it is a good place to study because it helps me more, practice better and makes new friends and have many good teacher.

✓ Yes, I think it is a good place to study because it helps me improve, practice better, make new friends, and has many good teachers.

Several issues: 'helps me more' is vague—use 'helps me improve'; parallel verbs should match form: 'practice better' and 'make new friends' use base form; 'have many good teacher' must agree: use 'has many good teachers' (singular/plural and subject-verb agreement). This fixes quantifier and agreement errors. (Quantifier and subject-verb agreement.)

× Yes, I would like the place where I study to more to be more positive because it would help me become more confident and better. MMM.

✓ Yes, I would like the place where I study to be more positive because it would help me become more confident and better.

The phrase 'to more to be more positive' is incorrect word order and redundancy. Remove the extra 'more' and place 'to be' before the adjective: 'to be more positive'. Also avoid filler 'MMM'. (Sentence structure correction.)

× Well, I plan to take a master degree in business next year because I want to improve my management skills and find better jobs. For example, I will apply to UH to two universities and also take an.

✓ Well, I plan to take a master's degree in Business next year because I want to improve my management skills and find better jobs. For example, I will apply to two universities, including UH, and also take an English test.

Use the possessive form 'master's degree' (article/formation), capitalize 'Business' when referring to a program if needed, and 'apply to two universities' not 'to UH to two universities'. The sentence was incomplete 'also take an' — likely 'an English test' (e.g., TOEFL/IELTS). Fix articles and complete the idea. (Article and sentence completion correction.)

× For example, I will apply to UH to two universities and also take an.

✓ For example, I will apply to two universities, including UH, and also take an English test.

The original used 'apply to UH to two universities' which duplicates prepositions. Use 'apply to two universities' and clarify 'including UH'. Also complete the phrase 'take an' with the noun 'English test'. (Preposition and sentence completion correction.)