Study— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Make the answer more concise and fluent: begin with a clear topic sentence stating your current status, then add one or two specific supporting details. Remove filler words (uh, um) and avoid mixing past and present without clarification.

Example: I am currently working as a chemist in a commercial laboratory. I studied science at Hong Kong Metropolitan University, where I carried out many laboratory experiments and analysed the results. Now I mainly focus on environmental and analytical testing in my job.

Suggestion: Start with a clear topic sentence naming the university and its location, then give one or two specific, coherent details. Remove hesitation sounds and correct grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement, 'busiest' -> 'busy').

Example: I studied at Hong Kong Metropolitan University, which is in the ****** area of Hong Kong. The campus is in a busy district, but the university itself is relatively quiet and conducive to studying compared with many other local universities.

Suggestion: Answer directly then support with a specific reason. Reduce fillers and complete the sentence (e.g., 'allocated to them'). Use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to improve coherence.

Example: I think it depends on the course. For healthcare subjects such as nursing and medicine it is a good place to study because the university provides many clinical resources and simulation facilities for students.

Suggestion: Give a direct recommendation then provide one specific reason and possible benefit. Use formal language ('want to' instead of 'wanna') and remove fillers. Keep to two or three sentences.

Example: Yes. I would like the university to purchase more advanced analytical instruments, particularly for heavy-metal analysis. Making these instruments available to students would improve practical training and better prepare us for laboratory careers.

Suggestion: Start by stating your main plan succinctly, then add one or two specific steps you will take. Avoid incomplete sentences and filler sounds. Use clear linking words (e.g., 'after that', 'then') and finish your thoughts fully.

Example: My main plan is to complete my final-year project on environmental analysis. After that, I will consult regularly with my supervisors to resolve any problems and aim to publish the results or apply them in my workplace.

× I'm currently working as a chemist in a commercial laboratory.

✓ I'm currently working as a chemist at a commercial laboratory.

Use 'at' to indicate place of work or employment (at a laboratory/company). 'In' can be used for being inside a building but 'at' is more natural for workplace location.

× I used to study as a university student, uh in Hong Kong Metropolitan University and my major was science, so I have to do a lot of experiments and produce uh experimental results.

✓ I studied at Hong Kong Metropolitan University where I majored in science, so I had to do a lot of experiments and produce experimental results.

The original mixes past and present incorrectly and uses awkward phrasing. 'Used to study as a university student' is redundant; use 'I studied at ... where I majored in ...'. Past activities should use past tense ('had to') to match 'studied' and 'majored'.

× I studied in Hong Kong Metropolitan University is located in uh, ****** area which is one of the most busiest uh location in Hong Kong and it is relatively quiet compared to umm, most of the university in Hong Kong.

✓ Hong Kong Metropolitan University is located in the ****** area, which is one of the busiest locations in Hong Kong, and it is relatively quiet compared to most universities in Hong Kong.

Use 'located in the' for location and 'the ****** area' needs definite article. 'Most busiest' is incorrect (double superlative); use 'busiest' or 'one of the busiest'. 'Location' should be plural 'locations' or use 'one of the busiest areas.' Also 'most of the university' should be 'most universities.'

× Actually, I believe it depends on the students. If they are studying UH, and majoring in uh, healthcare related subjects, for example, nursing and medical departments, uh, it is a good place for them to study because, uh, there are lots of resources that are allocated in.

✓ Actually, I believe it depends on the students. If they are studying and majoring in healthcare-related subjects, for example nursing and medical programs, it is a good place for them to study because there are lots of resources allocated there.

Remove 'UH' (unclear) and hyphenate 'healthcare-related.' Use 'programs' rather than 'departments' for clarity. The phrase 'allocated in' is incorrect; use 'allocated there' or 'available there.'

× Yes, definitely. If I wanna change within my major where I study, I wish the school could uh, purchase more advanced uh, analytical instruments, uh, especially uh, instruments about heavy metal analysis and available to all students.

✓ Yes, definitely. If I want changes within my major, I wish the school would purchase more advanced analytical instruments, especially instruments for heavy metal analysis and make them available to all students.

Informal 'wanna' should be 'want.' Use 'wish the school would' to express desire for a change. 'Instruments about heavy metal analysis' is awkward; use 'instruments for heavy metal analysis.' Add 'make them' to complete 'available to all students.'

× Is a good question. And in the future, I have to, uh, finish my final year project, which is about, uh, environmental analysis. And I have to make sure that if I have anything I don't understand, I can consult with my professors and my consultants, so I would know what I would.

✓ That's a good question. In the future, I have to finish my final year project, which is about environmental analysis. I also need to make sure that if there is anything I don't understand, I can consult my professors and advisors so I know what to do.

Begin with 'That's a good question' for natural phrasing. Remove filler words and use consistent present/future forms: 'have to finish' is fine, then 'I also need to make sure' flows better. Use 'if there is anything' and 'consult my professors and advisors' (advisors preferred to 'consultants'). 'So I know what to do' completes the idea; original sentence was incomplete.