Opportunities— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Your answer has a clear opening and provides a relevant example, but it is incomplete because it ends with “Moreover, I loved.” Also, say “the school drama club” or “a school drama club,” and avoid slightly unnatural phrases such as “during my school days” and “participated in many different kinds of activities.” Complete the final idea and explain briefly what you enjoyed about the drama club. Keep the answer to three or four complete sentences.

Example: Definitely. I was quite an outgoing child, so my parents and teachers encouraged me to try different activities. For example, I joined the school drama club and performed in several plays. I especially enjoyed acting because it helped me become more confident and express my ideas in front of an audience.

Suggestion: You express a balanced opinion, but there are several grammar and word-choice problems. Use “It depends on each person’s preferences and personality,” “different kinds of activities,” and “face challenges.” The phrase “comfortable with their family or situations” is unclear, and “So it depends if” should be replaced with “Ultimately, it depends on whether.” Organize the answer with a direct opinion, a contrast using “while,” and one specific example or reason.

Example: I think people should try a variety of activities, although it ultimately depends on their personality and circumstances. Adventurous people may enjoy trying new things because these experiences help them develop confidence and learn how to deal with challenges. However, more cautious people may prefer to explore new activities gradually, perhaps by taking up a new hobby or joining a local class.

× For example, I participated in school drama club where I performed extremely well.

✓ For example, I participated in a school drama club where I performed extremely well.

The singular countable noun phrase school drama club needs an article. Use a because you are introducing one club without specifying a particular club. If you mean a specific club already known to the listener, use the instead.

× It depend upon each person's own preference and personality.

✓ It depends upon each person's own preference and personality.

The subject it is third-person singular, so the present-tense verb need the -s ending: depends. The preposition upon is grammatically acceptable, although depends on is more common in everyday English.

× So it depends if they want to try diverse kind of things.

✓ So it depends on whether they want to try diverse kinds of things.

After depends on, whether is more appropriate than if when introducing an alternative or condition in formal English. The phrase depends on whether is a useful fixed structure to remember.

× So it depends if they want to try diverse kind of things.

✓ So it depends on whether they want to try diverse kinds of things.

The adjective diverse describes more than one kind, so the plural noun kinds is required. Also, things is plural, which supports the plural form kinds.