Opportunities— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer the question directly in the past tense and organize the response more clearly. Use “participated” instead of “participate,” “at that time” instead of “on that time,” and “in my village” rather than “on my village.” Avoid repeating the same idea and connect the reason and result with linking words such as “when,” “so,” or “as a result.” Add one specific detail about the experience, such as how you felt or what you learned.

Example: Yes, when I was a child, I had the opportunity to participate in a Kabaddi tournament in my village. It was my first time playing the sport, but I decided to join when I heard that the tournament was being held nearby. Although I was nervous at first, I really enjoyed the experience and became more confident.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with one or two well-developed reasons. Correct the subject-verb agreement error by using “enhance” with the plural subject “different things,” or more naturally, say “trying different things enhances confidence.” Replace the unclear phrase “what is in their mind” with “their interests and strengths.” Avoid repeating “try many things” and include a specific example or result to make the answer more effective.

Example: Yes, I believe people should try a variety of activities because doing so can build their confidence and help them discover their interests and strengths. For example, someone who tries public speaking may realize that they are good at communicating with others. As a result, they may become more willing to take on new challenges.

× Yes, when I was a child, I participate in the Kabaddi tournament in my village.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I participated in the Kabaddi tournament in my village.

The action happened during the student’s childhood, so the simple past tense participated is required instead of the present-tense form participate.

× It is quite popular On that time I did not try before, but when I know about the tournament is held on my village, so I participate in it.

✓ It was quite popular. At that time, I had not tried it before, but when I learned that the tournament was held in my village, I participated in it.

Because the student is describing a past experience, was, had not tried, learned, was held, and participated are needed. At that time is the correct prepositional phrase, and in my village is correct instead of on my village. The structure when I know about the tournament is held is incorrect; it should be when I learned that the tournament was held. Do not use both but and so to connect the same result clause. Also, use the past perfect had not tried to show that this happened before another past event.

× In my opinion, yes, people should try as many different things because it enhance their confidence and it reveals their inner personality, what is in their mind and what is their passion.

✓ In my opinion, yes, people should try as many different things because trying different things enhances their confidence and reveals their inner personalities, including what they have in mind and what their passions are.

The gerund phrase trying different things is singular, so it takes enhances, not enhance. The subject does not need to be repeated before reveals. Since the sentence refers to people generally, personalities and passions are more appropriate plural forms. In embedded questions, use normal statement word order: what they have in mind and what their passions are, not what is their passion.