Opportunities— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: 「when Mani was a child」は「when I was a child」の誤りです。また、「horse lighting」ではなく「horse riding」を使います。最初に「Yes, I did.」と直接答え、その後に活動の効果や具体的な経験を説明すると、より自然で効果的です。「horse riding」を繰り返さず、「the activity」などの代名詞を使いましょう。さらに、「contributed to my physical development」のように、主語と動詞の形を正しくしてください。

Example: Yes, I did. When I was a child, I had the opportunity to try horse riding. I enjoyed learning how to control the horse, and the activity helped me become more physically active and confident.

Suggestion: 意見は明確ですが、「Some sports and help people」は文法的に誤っているため、「Some activities help people develop their physical skills」としてください。「other things help them to understand each other」は、「other activities help people understand different perspectives」のように、より自然で具体的に表現できます。理由を示す際は「For example」や「In addition」を使うと、内容のつながりがよくなります。また、スポーツ以外の具体例を1つ加えると、語彙と内容の幅が広がります。

Example: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities whenever possible. Sports can help them develop physical skills, while activities such as volunteering can teach them how to communicate with different people. As a result, they may become more confident and open-minded.

× Yes, when Mani was a child I had the opportunity to horse lighting. It is a good thing for me because I could understand horses with horse lighting and also horseliding contribute to my physical growth.

✓ Yes, when I was a child, I had the opportunity to go horse riding. It was a good experience for me because I could understand horses better through horse riding, and horse riding contributed to my physical growth.

The subject horse riding is a singular gerund phrase, so it requires the singular verb contributes in the present tense or contributed in the past tense. Because the student is describing a childhood experience, the past-tense form contributed is more appropriate. The expression horse lighting is not grammatically correct for this meaning; the standard expression is horse riding.

× Some sports and help people to grow with their physical skills and other things help them to understand each other.

✓ Some sports help people develop their physical skills, and other activities help them understand one another.

The word and incorrectly appears between the subject Some sports and the verb help. A sentence should have a clear subject–verb structure: Some sports help. Also, activities is a more suitable parallel subject than things in this context. The two ideas are joined correctly with a comma and and.