Opportunities— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer the question more directly and use natural grammatical structures. The phrase “did not attend many activities rather than” is incorrect; say “did not take part in many activities apart from.” Also, use “basic sports at school” instead of “school basic sports,” and avoid repeating “rather than.” Add one specific example to make your answer more developed and effective.

Example: No, I didn’t have many opportunities to try new activities as a child. Apart from basic sports at school, I rarely joined any clubs because my parents wanted me to focus on my studies. For example, I would usually go straight home after school to do my homework.

Suggestion: Your opinion is clear, but the answer is too brief and contains a grammatical error. Say “because it helps them gain more experience” or “because it allows them to gain more experience,” rather than “because it leads to gain.” Add a supporting reason and a specific example, using a linking word such as “For example” or “As a result.”

Example: Yes, I think people should try as many different things as possible because it helps them gain experience and discover their interests. For example, someone who tries different sports, hobbies, or part-time jobs may eventually find an activity they really enjoy. As a result, they can develop new skills and become more confident.

× No, in my childhood I did not attend many activities rather than just school basic sports because my parents were more focused on my studies rather than to attend extra clubs.

✓ No. During my childhood, I did not take part in many activities apart from basic school sports because my parents focused more on my studies than on my participation in extracurricular clubs.

The original sentence uses the structure 'did not attend many activities rather than...' incorrectly. The phrase 'apart from' clearly expresses that basic school sports were the exception. The sentence also needs a clearer parallel structure after 'focused more on... than on...'.

× No, in my childhood I did not attend many activities rather than just school basic sports because my parents were more focused on my studies rather than to attend extra clubs.

✓ No. During my childhood, I did not take part in many activities apart from basic school sports because my parents focused more on my studies than on my participation in extracurricular clubs.

The adjective 'basic' should come before the noun modifier 'school' in the phrase 'basic school sports.' In English, descriptive adjectives usually come before nouns that describe the category or type of something.

× No, in my childhood I did not attend many activities rather than just school basic sports because my parents were more focused on my studies rather than to attend extra clubs.

✓ No. During my childhood, I did not take part in many activities apart from basic school sports because my parents focused more on my studies than on my participating in extracurricular clubs.

After the comparison structure 'rather than' or 'than,' the verb should be parallel with the surrounding structure. The infinitive 'to attend' is incorrect here. Use a gerund phrase such as 'participating in extracurricular clubs' after the preposition 'on.'

× In my opinion, yes people should try as many different things as possible because it leads to gain more experience.

✓ In my opinion, yes, people should try as many different things as possible because this leads to gaining more experience.

The preposition 'to' in the expression 'lead to' is part of the prepositional phrase, so it should be followed by a gerund, not an infinitive. Therefore, use 'leads to gaining,' not 'leads to gain.'