Opportunities— Part 1 Report

Suggestion: Answer the question directly in the first sentence and use a more natural phrase such as “I had the opportunity to try...” instead of “I tried different activities.” Avoid repetition and incomplete grammar, especially “because I because I have.” Use the past tense consistently: “I performed” and “I wore.” Add one clear result or personal feeling to make the answer more developed, and use a linking word such as “For example” or “As a result.”

Example: Yes, I had the opportunity to try several activities as a child, especially dancing. For example, I took part in performances at school and wore beautiful costumes on stage. As a result, I became more confident and really enjoyed performing in front of other people.

Suggestion: Give a clear opinion and explain it with one or two relevant reasons. The phrase “the most experimental time” is unnatural in this context; say “It is a good way to discover your interests and abilities.” Avoid unclear or incorrect examples such as “power plan” and “teach something for your child.” Use accurate activities, such as learning a musical instrument or trying a new sport, and connect your ideas with “because,” “for example,” or “as a result.”

Example: Yes, I think people should try a variety of activities because this helps them discover their interests and strengths. For example, they might learn a musical instrument, take up a new sport, or travel somewhere unfamiliar. Even if they do not continue with every activity, they can gain useful skills and become more open-minded.

× Well, when I was a child I tried different activities for instance dancing and it was very crucial experience because I because I have different performances. I had very beautiful dresses.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I tried different activities, for instance, dancing, and it was a very crucial experience because I had different performances. I had very beautiful dresses.

The singular countable noun experience needs the indefinite article a. Use a before a singular countable noun when you mention one non-specific example. For improvement, check whether singular countable nouns need a, an, or the.

× Well, when I was a child I tried different activities for instance dancing and it was very crucial experience because I because I have different performances. I had very beautiful dresses.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I tried different activities, for instance, dancing, and it was a very crucial experience because I had different performances. I had very beautiful dresses.

The answer describes experiences that happened during childhood, so the past tense is required. Have must be changed to had to agree with the past-time context. When telling a story about a finished period, keep the verbs consistently in the past tense.

× Well, when I was a child I tried different activities for instance dancing and it was very crucial experience because I because I have different performances. I had very beautiful dresses.

✓ Well, when I was a child, I tried different activities, for instance, dancing. It was a very crucial experience because I had different performances. I had very beautiful dresses.

The original answer contains a run-on structure and the repeated phrase because I because I. Separating the ideas into complete sentences makes the response clearer. Avoid joining several independent ideas with only and; use full stops or suitable conjunctions.

× Of course they should it's the most experimental time when you can try doing something different in your life, for example, power plan or parachute, or you can teach something for your child.

✓ Of course, they should. It is the most experimental time when you can try doing something different in your life, for example, a power plan or a parachute. Alternatively, you can teach something to your child.

Of course, they should and it is the most experimental time are independent clauses, so they should not be joined without punctuation. Use a full stop or a suitable conjunction. Separating the ideas also makes the examples easier to understand.

× Of course they should it's the most experimental time when you can try doing something different in your life, for example, power plan or parachute, or you can teach something for your child.

✓ Of course, they should. It is the most experimental time when you can try doing something different in your life, for example, a power plan or a parachute, or you can teach something to your child.

Power plan and parachute are singular countable nouns, so they need indefinite articles in this context: a power plan and a parachute. Remember to use a or an before a singular countable noun when it is not specific.

× Of course they should it's the most experimental time when you can try doing something different in your life, for example, power plan or parachute, or you can teach something for your child.

✓ Of course, they should. It is the most experimental time when you can try doing something different in your life, for example, a power plan or a parachute, or you can teach something to your child.

The usual preposition after teach when introducing the recipient is to: teach something to your child. You can also say teach your child something. Use to when describing the person who receives information or instruction.